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Lone Ranger
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since 2000-04-16
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Salvador , Bahia , Brazil

0 posted 2000-05-19 11:07 PM



Hopelessness of the hopelessness
Last and sad light of a soul in gloom
Life is a vain dream that life takes
Full of gentle sorrowful afflictions

More beautiful is the
Brilliancy of the snowing sky
Than the strong magnificence of success
More human is the
Wish the feeds us
Than the children's clear laughs

I , follow my lead, misunderstood
Without belief nor love, like a lost man
In the cruel certainty that nothing matters

Sometimes a bird comes singing
But he passes by, and I follow my way
In the never-ending sadness of a dead soul




 "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free
It was always thus and always thus will be"
Prof. Keating
Dead Poets Society

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brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
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ireland
1 posted 2000-05-20 05:57 AM


I loved that movie, and now to your poem...wow... I really loved this,
fantastic images that were beautiful even if the mood was tragic. great poem.


Life is a vain dream that life takes
Full of gentle sorrowful afflictions

Than the strong magnificence of success
More human is the
Wish the feeds us

,like a lost man
In the cruel certainty that nothing matters

Sometimes a bird comes singing
But he passes by, and I follow my way
In the never-ending sadness of a dead soul


Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
2 posted 2000-05-20 11:22 AM


~~interesting read~~kinda on the dark side!
~~~~~nice writing~~~~

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA
3 posted 2000-05-21 11:06 AM


A very dark poem, and so well-written and expressed!  I do hope that now you have found happiness in your life.

"Sometimes a bird comes singing
but he passes by, and I follow my way
in a never-ending sadness of a dead soul"

Wow!  What a line, what an ending, I relate to such an emptiness.

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee

Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London
4 posted 2000-05-21 12:41 PM


Well this is certainly an interesting way to look at things ... when quality of life dips to where nothing matters I prefer to think of it as a lost soul ( still has a ray of hope )
exceptionally well done

Rex

Lone Ranger
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since 2000-04-16
Posts 92
Salvador , Bahia , Brazil
5 posted 2000-05-21 03:09 PM


thanks everyone!!!
and, well you can say that I am yet a lost soul, but don't worry I am already seeing the light in the end of the tunnel!
Again thanks!

 "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free
It was always thus and always thus will be"
Prof. Keating
Dead Poets Society

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