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Of a Tide |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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There hurts a float of cry easing across the way and close surround a gap between the air and this flesh where your touch no longer travels over me and around there are steps languid in sanded shores of memory where shells are echoes and crusts cover empty hollows of my living so slowly incomplete I yearn you over me and around and here I am driftwood seaspray a play of waves alone of a tide without you over me and around (over and around without your whisper screams my mind) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW Kamla this is so very beautiful, every line is filled with longing. It truly is gorgeous.  Excellent writing as always Soul-Sis Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kamla, Well this is my first WOW. *L* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
there are steps languid in sanded shores of memory where shells are echoes and crusts cover empty hollows of my living so slowly incomplete I yearn you over me and around and here I am driftwood seaspray a play of waves alone of a tide without you over me and around (over and around without your whisper screams my mind) ---------- this poem is exceptional!! it is poetry in motion. breathtaking and emotionally felt. take a bow for this jewel. take care, jm PS may i mention as well that you have outstanding taste in icon choices  "sharer of the butterfly slipper" LOL gotta love that b-squirrel. It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving How one move just puts me by myself There you go just trusting someone else Now I know I put us both through hell ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me And I'm not sayin We ever had the right to hold on I just didn't wanna let you get away from me. ~MB20~Leave |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Quite beautiful Kamla. . .I know this feeling quite well. . . Excellent poem. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Wow is right! This is fabulous, Kam! Absolutely your best yet! Corinne |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kamla, what a wonderful breath-taking poem...I have missed you taking my oxygen lately....this poem is wonderfully done!! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Severn rides again!....and as grace fully as ever, I may add. This is great, Kamla.... |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow, Kamla, this is the pure essance of missing someone - "a gap between the air and this flesh where your touch no longer travels over me and around" As always, your words flow elegantly with your emotion. Beautifully done. Michael |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
extraordinary...an aching whisper of verse... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Angel - aching with longing, yeah I suppose it is. Thankyou hon. Sy - a wow from you is like sunlight on a cold gloomy day my friend...thankyou. Butterfly sharer - (don't we have good taste...hehe). 'It is poetry in motion.' Now that is just one of the loveliest compliments I have ever been given...thanks and thanks again! Sven - I think so many people do know that feeling. Thankyou! Corinne - hugs hon - how are you? And thankyou. Martie - I have missed being here so much (grrr...study...grrrr). Thankyou!! 'deer one - she never stopped...she just didn't come through this part of town for awhile...lol. Thanks M! Michael - thankyou! I know you can identify with this well. Serenity - Aching is definitely the prime emotion in this so I am so glad I managed to convey that - thankyou so much! K |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Kamla, I absolutely loved this poem! It flowed with the emotions...beautifully, passionately stating them in such elegant words. The longing, the yearning, almost jumps off the page. Excellent work, Kris the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Little Butterfly Gal~ Such a lovely poem from you. Hope studying isn't getting in the way of your writing ! !  Love you .. love this ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
where your touch no longer travels over me and around ----------------- I yearn you over me and around and here I am ------------------ -without you over me and around (over and around without your whisper screams my mind) Another sighhhhh |
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