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Of a Tide

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Severn
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0 posted 05-19-2000 07:36 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

There hurts
a float of cry
easing across the way
and close surround

a gap between the air
and this flesh  
where your touch

no longer travels
  over me
     and around


there are
steps languid in sanded
shores of memory
where shells are echoes

and crusts cover empty
hollows of my living
so slowly incomplete

I yearn you
  over me
   and around


and here I am

driftwood
seaspray
a play of waves
alone of a tide

without you
   over me
     and around


            (over and around
                 without your whisper
                      screams my mind)

                    


  

© Copyright 2000 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
Dark Angel
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1 posted 05-19-2000 08:48 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

WOW Kamla this is so very beautiful, every line is filled with longing. It truly is gorgeous.   Excellent writing as always Soul-Sis  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)


Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 05-19-2000 09:04 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Kamla,
Well this is my first WOW. *L*
Janet Marie
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3 posted 05-19-2000 11:58 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

there are
steps languid in sanded
shores of memory
where shells are echoes

and crusts cover empty
hollows of my living
so slowly incomplete

I yearn you
  over me
   and around

and here I am

driftwood
seaspray
a play of waves
alone of a tide

without you
   over me
     and around

            (over and around
                 without your whisper
                      screams my mind)
----------

this poem is exceptional!!
it is poetry in motion.
breathtaking and emotionally felt.
take a bow for this jewel.
take care, jm
                

PS may i mention as well that you have outstanding taste in icon choices  
"sharer of the butterfly slipper" LOL
gotta love that b-squirrel.
    



 It's amazing
How you make your face just like a wall
How you take your heart and turn it off
How I turn my head and you lose it all ...
And it's unnerving
How one move just puts me by myself
There you go just trusting someone else
Now I know I put us both through hell ...
I'm not sayin
That there was nothing wrong
I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me
And I'm not sayin
We ever had the right to hold on
I just didn't wanna let you get away from me.
~MB20~Leave


Sven
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4 posted 05-20-2000 12:03 AM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Quite beautiful Kamla. . .I know this feeling quite well. . .

Excellent poem. . .

-----------------------------------------------------------



 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Corinne
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since 10-28-1999
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state of confusion


5 posted 05-20-2000 12:56 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Wow is right!  This is fabulous, Kam!  Absolutely your best yet!

Corinne
Martie
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6 posted 05-20-2000 06:34 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Kamla, what a wonderful breath-taking poem...I have missed you taking my oxygen lately....this poem is wonderfully done!!
Balladeer
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7 posted 05-20-2000 07:12 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Severn rides again!....and as grace fully as ever, I may add. This is great, Kamla....
Michael
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8 posted 05-20-2000 07:27 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Wow, Kamla,
this is the pure essance of missing someone -

"a gap between the air
and this flesh  
where your touch

no longer travels
  over me
     and around"

As always, your words flow elegantly with your emotion.  Beautifully done.


Michael

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9 posted 05-20-2000 10:29 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

extraordinary...an aching whisper of verse...

Severn
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10 posted 05-21-2000 07:25 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Angel - aching with longing, yeah I suppose it is. Thankyou hon.

Sy - a wow from you is like sunlight on a cold gloomy day my friend...thankyou.

Butterfly sharer - (don't we have good taste...hehe). 'It is poetry in motion.' Now that is just one of the loveliest compliments I have ever been given...thanks and thanks again!

Sven - I think so many people do know that feeling. Thankyou!

Corinne - hugs hon - how are you? And thankyou.  

Martie - I have missed being here so much (grrr...study...grrrr). Thankyou!!

'deer one - she never stopped...she just didn't come through this part of town for awhile...lol. Thanks M!

Michael - thankyou! I know you can identify with this well.

Serenity - Aching is definitely the prime emotion in this so I am so glad I managed to convey that - thankyou so much!

K
warmhrt
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11 posted 05-21-2000 11:49 PM       View Profile for warmhrt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for warmhrt

Kamla,

I absolutely loved this poem! It flowed with the emotions...beautifully, passionately stating them in such elegant words. The longing, the yearning, almost jumps off the page.

Excellent work,
Kris

 the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing
A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare
Marge Tindal
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12 posted 05-21-2000 11:54 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Little Butterfly Gal~
Such a lovely poem from you.
Hope studying isn't getting in
the way of your writing ! !  
Love you .. love this !
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Dark Angel
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13 posted 04-05-2003 06:23 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

where your touch

no longer travels
  over me
     and around
-----------------

I yearn you
  over me
   and around

and here I am

------------------

-without you
   over me
     and around

            (over and around
                 without your whisper
                      screams my mind)


Another sighhhhh
                    


  

 
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