How to Join Member's Area Private Library Search Today's Topics p Login
Main Forums Discussion Tech Talk Mature Content Archives
   Nav Win
 Archives
 Open Poetry #7 Archive
 Mistaken Identity
 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12
Follow us on Facebook

 This is an Archive. You may post a reply, but new topics are not allowed.

 
User Options
Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Admin Print Send ECard
Passions in Poetry

Mistaken Identity

 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
Lost Dreamer
Member Elite
since 06-20-99
Posts 2589
Normal, Illinois


0 posted 05-19-2000 06:08 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Mistaken Identity

I am the victim
of mistaken identity
the mirror lies,
it looks like me
but I don't recognize
the person I see.
The thoughts
living in another time
another place
a galaxy removed.
A platitude
of reality's sword
shards of me spinning
begging for more
a merry-go-round
of denials.
Seeing, wanting, feeling
butterflies of past
the gone and died
relationships.
Why am I lost looking
for rooms
that don't exist,
desiring the unreachable,
touching my minds
saved recordings
failing to acknowledge
they should have
mission impossibled
years before.
The doors
to never, never land
swinging open and closed
taunting me
severing my wisdom
dicing my mind
tossing it
dressing it
eating it alive.


© Copyright 2000 RiaL - All Rights Reserved
doreen peri
Member Rara Avis
since 05-25-99
Posts 8028
Virginia


1 posted 05-19-2000 07:22 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

this is absolutely well done, succinct, full of imagery and emotion!!

love it, gloria!!

I truly think this is the very best i've read from you... excellent work, m'friend!
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 08-22-99
Posts 23002


2 posted 05-19-2000 08:13 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I agree with Doreen! This is without a doubt the best piece of writing I have seen from you to date! Fantastic!

Denise
Lost Dreamer
Member Elite
since 06-20-99
Posts 2589
Normal, Illinois


3 posted 05-19-2000 11:20 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Doreen, and Denise, Thank you both so very much, I appreciate your reading and your kind compliments.  
Jon Mewett
Senior Member
since 03-04-2000
Posts 1306


4 posted 05-20-2000 03:41 AM       View Profile for Jon Mewett   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jon Mewett

Hold on to that muse here Dreamer this is wonderful.

Jon
Lost Dreamer
Member Elite
since 06-20-99
Posts 2589
Normal, Illinois


5 posted 05-20-2000 09:12 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Jon: Thank you very much, I appreciate your kind reply.  
lorilockheart
Member
since 05-06-2000
Posts 206
Alabama


6 posted 05-20-2000 09:27 AM       View Profile for lorilockheart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lorilockheart

It seems you've touched on a part of me in these words.  Maybe all of us.  I love poetry that I can relate to.  Thanks!

Lori

 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance.
song by LeeAnn Womack
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite
since 07-25-99
Posts 2961
Arkansas


7 posted 05-20-2000 01:13 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

OUCH...this was sharp like pain itself!  Very powerful writing you do, especially when speaking of emotions!  Btw, I have a mirror like that too, if it makes you feel any better.     You take care of you!  You know who you are!  -pFF
7
Member
since 04-26-2000
Posts 118
Amherst, MA, USA


8 posted 05-20-2000 01:30 PM       View Profile for 7   Email 7   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for 7

wow... very powerful.

two phrases i love:

"reality's sword"
"mission impossibled" (never heard that as a verb before   )

good job!  7
SpitFire
Member Elite
since 04-19-2000
Posts 2428


9 posted 05-20-2000 04:13 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Strong emotional outpour here.  Wonderful work. Just wonderful...what a great read...I have sat in front of this very mirror and thought these same thoughts....amazing. Thank you for sharing.
Aimster
Member Elite
since 02-19-2000
Posts 4367
Charlotte, NC


10 posted 05-20-2000 06:45 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

Gloria!

wow! this was written with much intensity and depth. i read it a couple times and each time came away with a new meaning or something i had missed. this was written very very well!

take care,
Amy  

p.s. i agree hold onto whatever is inspiring this...this is excellent writing!

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 06-05-99
Posts 26302
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA


11 posted 05-20-2000 07:10 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Allow me to join in the chorus of BRAVOS. This one is very well done, Gloria....
Lost Dreamer
Member Elite
since 06-20-99
Posts 2589
Normal, Illinois


12 posted 05-22-2000 12:28 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Lori: Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed.  

Genn: Thanks for reading and replying, and yes I was at the intensity of the emotions when I wrote this so it came through very strong. Yes I know who I am most of the time.  

7: Thank you, glad you enjoyed it.  

Spitfire: Wow, thank you so much for your kind reply.  

Aimster: Thank you very much for your kind response, I was very intense at the moment of writing this, as for holding onto what created this not sure if it would be emotionally healthy for me to do so. I was in another time and place, way far away from reality.

Balladeer: Thank you for your bravo's, I feel I've done well when you respond.  

 
 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
All times are ET (US) Top
  User Options
>> Archives >> Open Poetry #7 >> Mistaken Identity Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Print Send ECard

 

pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Today's Topics | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary



© Passions in Poetry and netpoets.com 1998-2013
All Poetry and Prose is copyrighted by the individual authors