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The Would Be Poet’s Attempt

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Sunshine
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The Would Be Poet’s Attempt

Pen in hand,
paper below,
gathering of liquid thoughts
not to be merged simply
but wrought
as if with fire
from the belly of life,
with a struggle at birth
and no whimper at death.

And for her it cannot be done ~
for one leads to another,
spoken aloud
the word carries a tone,
the tone leads to a tune,
soon an orchestra’s sounds
fill the air and lead on to
another’s ear who hears
the word and
feels the pulse
of life…..

does she want impact or
is it enough to impart
deep feelings
so wretchedly deep
it gasps at the thought
of becoming known
to have
either…..

Pen in hand.
Paper below.


19 May 2000
©KRJ




 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow



[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 05-19-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Karilea Rilling - All Rights Reserved
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does she want impact or
is it enough to impart
deep feelings
so wretchedly deep
it gasps at the thought
of becoming known
to have
either…..

Pen in hand.
Paper below.

---------------


pen in hand
paper below
write your heart
secrets to show
pain imparts
impact grows
poet you are
poetry you sow.


very very COOL poem Sun,
very creative and unique,
well written and thought out.
very.
take care,jm
Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 05-19-2000 11:08 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Goal #1 - To think like Sunshine

Goal #2 - To melt them into "liquid thoughts"

Goal #3 - To dip my quill into the exquisite ink

Liz
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JM, your input means a lot...

Elizabeth, this is the highest form of praise...my thoughts are always with you and all of your gifts...
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..."but wrought
as if with fire
from the belly of life,"

Beautiful, Sunshine. Life is indeed, poetry in and of itself. I love how you've written this...

~ Claire


 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

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Pen in hand,
paper below,
Sky above,
Earth below

Early morning, dew,
Or misty deep-blue,
paining a picturesque hue,
merging liquid thoughts into a cue.

Clueless as I sat without a thought,
Read the poetess' words, a delight,
a ray of sunshine through my window slits, caught,
me by surprise, my pen began to write.

Words, I didn't have a clue,
about, began to take shape,
forming a persistent queue,
A chain of thoughts flow with mouth agape...

Wondering beyond wonders, as I read this poetry of yours, I am glad, I just did....

Thanks Karilea for the spark, I almost went into a block...before I read this
Regards,
Sudhir.



 Life is like a painting,
That in an art gallery is left hanging,
Though many come just to look at it,
A very few actually come to enjoy it.
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Sudhir, may sunshine light all of your days, and writer's block only be times of rest...
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Beautiful poem, Sunshine!

Denise
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Thank you, Denise
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Hey sunshine,
I loved this poem, and it reflects so much on what I sometimes feel. You captured the nature of "art" absolutely faboulasly stunning!!
Adri
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Karilea~
What admiration I have for your thoughts.
Your writing has taken on new wings.
Must be an adorable muse that sits in your inkwell of delight !
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Encore! Encore! With the breaking rays of the glorious sun...with Sunshine her poetry is always fun  

^_^ LadySofia


 That time of year thou mayst in me behold, When yellow leaves, or none, or few, do hang, Upon those boughs which shake against the cold, Bare ruined choirs where late the sweet birds sang. In me thou see'st the twilight of such day, As after sunset fadeth in the west, Which by-and-by black night doth take away, Death's second self that seals up all in rest. In me thou see'st the glowing of such fire, That on the ashes of his youth doth lie, As the deathbed whereon it must expire, Consumed with that which it was nourished by. This thou perciev'st, which makes thy love more strong, To love that well which thou must leave ere long.
William Shakespeare


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Oh, Sunshine, how exquisitely you express yourself!  You truly are a ray of sunshine.

Lori

 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance.
song by LeeAnn Womack
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Ardonida, Marge, Lady Sofia and LoriLH, thank you so much for your kind words.  Yes, my muse has been having much fun with me of late...pokes her head in and out...
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