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Ixtab
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since 1999-06-23
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MEXICAlpan de las tunas

0 posted 2000-05-18 08:50 PM


Hate me she pleaded.
Ask for the moon not to phase
for the sun not to rise
for rain not drop
for thunder not to sound
I answered...

And my eyes became water
my knees sustained a dead weight
opression of uselesness
dire heart sadly pumping
my unfelt, thick , blood.

Why did i fly into hell?
a road well cautioned it was
but blind love's guide
is the goddess of insanity

Who could know love
without tasting bitterness?
who could know victory
if fallen ye havenĀ“t.

Hate me she pleaded

So I Will

Let the moon be always full
night be eternal
rain shoot to the sky
thunder be mute.
our love die.

© Copyright 2000 Ixtab - All Rights Reserved
netswan
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
1 posted 2000-05-18 11:52 PM


Hi There Ixtab - what a great poem.
Wonderful

netswan

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2 posted 2000-05-19 01:02 AM


Ixtab~
You know what ?
I like this.
Raw emotion told with such feeling.
You've got some great lines in here.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136
Mobile, AL
3 posted 2000-05-19 01:08 AM


Wow! This is very sad, but very truthful. Overall I enjoyed it...especially the way you ended it.

 Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
4 posted 2000-05-19 01:09 AM


Hey! Long time no see!!! This is a good poem..nice to read you again.  
Angelwings
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since 1999-08-27
Posts 222
IL, USA
5 posted 2000-05-19 02:06 AM


Wow~
This is told with such feeling.  It's painful to let a love die but it's healthier that way.  Thank you for sharing your pain it makes other feel that they aren't alone either.  I enjoyed reading your work and look forward to doing it again.

A dream is only impossible once you stop dreaming!

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2000-05-19 08:45 AM


Well written with lots of feelings and emotions.   James
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