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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Touch (Haiku) Words are rushing by a glimpse of love touches me words my heart can see... Gentle wind of breath touching soul from soft red lips whispered down my neck Nightly stars do tell in vibrations No One sees touching hearts with dreams. James Parker Haley May 18, 2000 [This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 05-22-2000).] |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Wonderful Parker! I really like these haikus done with more than one verse. Well done! netswan |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hey you... Im tempeted to make a "multiples joke" here (you started it) lol BUT this collection is so perfect and so beautifully written I dont wanna miss out on the chance to swoon instead. *SIGH* very very nice parker-man. only you could do sensual Haiku. later-sweet-gator jm |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Haleyja, You made a home run out of a tripple Good work, Enjoyed |
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Ardonida Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 76 |
Hey there WOW!! I thought this was stunningly done!! WOW!! I cannot write in this style, always a syllibal short or too much!! It is very difficult for me, but YOU, YOu surely are an artist and the words are your colors!! Kindly Ardonida |
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pandora Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 184 |
this is very lovely james sensual, tender.... lovely oh, and lovely. did i say lovely? (ummm... check your 'know' last stanza?  ) |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
So let me get this straight..... 1. Your heart is seeing things 2. The wind can breathe and wears makeup 3.And stars are vibrating in your dreams Damn!!! Your are better persciption drugs then me! Marina |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Park, Ethereal and exquisite! What pandora said, did you mean "No One?" in last Hiaku? |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Parker~ 'Gentle wind of breath touching soul from soft red lips whispered down my neck' Works for me, babe ! BIG TIME ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hippie_teen Junior Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 18Escondido, CA, USA |
A spectacular piece of poetry, and a wonderful format to present it. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
netswan, thank you. I like it this way to, I call this style "Separate But Together" because of the little thread that connects them. There probably is a violation of haiku form here, but sometimes its message before form that wins out.... to me as long as its 5-7-5... its Haiku or Senryu. Thats my story and I'm sticking to it.  Janet, my friend well I think maybe you should do it in a poem, and whisper it to us.... or should that be scream it to us..  Seymour, thats high praise coming from you good poet. thank you very much. Ardonida, well thank you thank you very much, I say that in a low down Elvis voice. Haven't run across any of your poems yet, welcome to Passions if I missed saying it. I'll check out your work. pandora, ah! yes you sure did say lovely, thank you. Also thank you on the spell tip. and did I say thank you... Marina, just high on life, and cable, warp speed scotty. Corinne, thank you sweet friend, Ethereal, yes i'll accept that evaluation. Very sweet of you to say. Marge, baby I like working for ya. thank you big time.... I mean BIG TIME. hippie_teen, thank you.... and welcome to passions. 60's and 70's back again. eh! Parker |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Back to the top you go! Corinne |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
your poetry is a soft breath of fresh air! Lovely!!! I am a fan of your poetry, I always look to read a new poem from you! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corinne, thanks. A Romantic Heart, thank you very much. Glad to be looked for, I'll just have to get off my butt and write something new. Parker |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
please do I am waiting for something new! Have you read my muse poem? |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Parker--how sweet and tender and a little provocative...yes, I say lovely too! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
A Romantic Heart, yes pressure, pressure, soon I hope..... whats it worth to ya. Martie, thank you, What me provocative. Parker |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Just blink testing nice to at you does this work.... tada |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
A beautiful write Parker... Enjoyed this very much... ~coco~ |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
testing ignore [This message has been edited by Parker (edited 07-28-2001).] |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow! Melissa~ |
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