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This Way To The Amazing Egress

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Effigy
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0 posted 05-18-2000 03:17 PM       View Profile for Effigy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Effigy

Loyalty, living lustrous lives
Originate ordeals, otherwise orthodox.
When we wonder why
either ever escaped either
radiance ravishes reckless realism.

Throughout the thrill
heaven's hated heretics have
an asocial assembly
numerous, nameless, naive, narcissus.

Lacking loves legalities
or other origins
vibrant violations void
every enchanting egress.


 There is something inside me
and I know it's good,
but understanding is misunderstood.



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brian madden
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1 posted 05-18-2000 03:36 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Fantastic images great use of alliteration.
I love this one.
Effigy
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2 posted 05-19-2000 12:35 PM       View Profile for Effigy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Effigy

Thanks I'm glad that you enjoyed. Alliteration is becoming one of my favorite styles.  
Severn
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3 posted 05-19-2000 07:14 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

I like! Takes a lot of work to base a poem around one element like this.

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Janet Marie
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4 posted 05-20-2000 12:33 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

excellent poem of Alliteration
but over and above that this is a very cool poem with cool imagery and vision
great writing.
later, jm

 It's amazing
How you make your face just like a wall
How you take your heart and turn it off
How I turn my head and you lose it all ...
And it's unnerving
How one move just puts me by myself
There you go just trusting someone else
Now I know I put us both through hell ...
I'm not sayin
That there was nothing wrong
I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me
And I'm not sayin
We ever had the right to hold on
I just didn't wanna let you get away from me.
~MB20~Leave


forne_marin
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5 posted 04-16-2004 12:08 AM       View Profile for forne_marin   Email forne_marin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit forne_marin's Home Page   View IP for forne_marin

Personally, I don't care for most Acrostics, because they focus too much on that first letter and not enough on the content of the poem--even yours, old buddy. HOWEVER, this one is definately the exception to the rule. This one can actually stand alone without the acrostic. I enjoyed it.
 
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