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~* A Tale - Seafoam & Mermen *~
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~* A Tale - Seafoam & Mermen *~ |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas 
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~* A Tale - Seafoam & Mermen *~ ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~ She'd walked along the shore all night, barefoot in the sand - She'd stopped to build a castle tall, alas it wouldn't stand. Her long hair blowing in the breeze, with seafoam at her feet - Her dress tail wet with salt, she decided to retreat... She turned to walk back to her car, she'd been there half the night - Walking, searching out her soul, but something wasn't right. The ocean seemed to beckon her, but she did not know why - 'Twas as if the waters wanted her, & she could feel their cry... With one last glance back to the sea, she started then to go - Brushing sand off of her feet, she heard a man cry "No..." The voice came from the waters deep, within a swelling wave - Through squinted eyes, she looked & saw the signal that he gave... Just below the salty surface, light like ember glowed - Lighting up the area, and then this figure showed. The upper body of a man rose up from waters blue - With arms stretched out toward her there, a breeze between them blew... His eyes of deepest ocean green, seemed to pull her near - He smiled then, a handsome smile, she walked to him - no fear. She stood there at the waters edge, the seafoam swirling round - Something magic in the air, like music, yet no sound... He beckoned her to come to him, she dove in without thought - And swam out fast to meet him - all her ponderings forgot. She broke the surface, took a breath & there before her eyes - Was a dark & brazen merman, but it came as no surprise... She had heard of such a creature, yet her eyes had never seen - His features so magnificent, so handsome in moonbeam. A soft light on his glistening skin, his eyes so sultry deep - The way his eyes looked through her soul, nearly made her weep... Why would such a creature fair, want to summon her? Was he the one meant for her love, or just a messenger? He took her in his arms, held her tight & kissed her lips - Then lightly traced across her eyes, her mouth, with fingertips... She'd never known a man so strong, who touched so tenderly - And just her luck, the one she found, lived deep beneath the sea! She smiled at the thought of it, but knew that he would stay - As long as he could, here with her, to be with her this way... He finally spoke, his voice so deep, lingered in her ears - He said, "I've watched you many times, I've swam here in your tears..." "You've nearly cried this ocean full, I've tasted all your pain, I've breathed the emptiness you feel, it falls on me like rain." "I know you come here often, and I've watched you from afar..." "You've walked my shore so many times - wondering who you are." With that, he kissed her lips again, her face in both his hands - ~At last, a man who knows her heart & truly understands...~ He said, "Swim with me here tonight, I'll take you far below, into waters warm & heavenly & lit with ember glow..." "I'll show you depths you've never known, here deep within my sea - Be with me now, complete me, we'll make love aquatically..." His smile broad, assuring her, she gave him thus, her hand - She glanced back o'er her shoulder - one last look toward the land. He gave her breath, his mouth on hers, his touch pure ecstasy - With moonlight in their eyes - they disappeared beneath the sea... ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~ -poetFemmeFatale May 17, 2000 |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
 Sorry guys, I just couldn't wrap it up! Argh! These "tales" I write of now, just get too darn long for their own good! LOL To any of you who made it all the way through, I APPLAUDE YOU!  You're all fabulous!  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
He finally spoke, his voice so deep, lingered in her ears - He said, "I've watched you many times, I've swam here in your tears..." "You've nearly cried this ocean full, I've tasted all your pain, I've breathed the emptiness you feel, it falls on me like rain." --------------- GEN THIS IS STUNNING!!! you have outdone your self... and im convinced you were a mermaid in another life. *smile* please let me sharpen your colored pencils for this one... it just has to be illustrated. later fantasy-gator jm |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Oh, my, oh my. Femme, I was going to read one last poem before shutting down for the night. Saw yours and thought, oh no a long one ---------THIS was worth the unblurring of my eyes -- I am so glad I read it. Clever Girl netswan |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I absolutely loved this PoetFemme! Such a flowing story, and so well told, from beginning to end! You made me feel as if I knew these two ... and I didn't want it to end! Will you write a "part 2" for us??? Please??? I loved this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Bleh... how many time do I have to tell you that your stuff is never too long? =) Very cool poem. I liked the imagery.. the ember glow and all.. very cool. Thanks for the read. =) --Dave "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Gen, this is just amazing. . . there really isn't another word to describe it. . . and you don't have to "finish" it. . . let my mind wander. . .let me make up my own conclusions to this wonderful "tale". . . I can think of many. . . And it's really not that long. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Gen, Girl you just keep surprising me with your talent....this is absolutely amazing I'm with Kit....hope there's a part 2 coming  Anything this well written could never be too long All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Now this would have been a good place to post that picture of you holding the seaweed...lol...but I digress. This is stunning! I never think you write too much but sometimes I think you don't write enough. "Do all that is in thine heart..." Gen dear, and we will consume it utterly. Peace |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
WOW--this was so beautiful!!!!! I am awe-struck by your story-telling talent!! Excellent poem! Christina =^..^= |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Lovely tail, I mean tale! All kidding aside, this is right up my alley, my kind of poetic story! Keep 'em coming! Corinne |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
WOW! This quite took my breath away Femme dear.... Wow. Excellent... K |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Janet - - You're the best, and yes, I've been referred to before as something of the sea - an evil mermaid if you will. I guess because I lead with my head, and not my tail ! LOL Btw, I'm working on the illustrations now and WOW, I want to thank you again for that idea! The combination is astounding! Take care girl!netswan - - hehe Thank you for focusing those pupils for this one! I know that lengthy poetry in not really preferred here, where time is of the essence, but it's hard to write a "story" in just a few lines!  I try to make it worth the reader's while...Kit McCallum - - Part 2....hhmm....I'm still working on Part 2 to Willowglades, however, this one would be my 2nd choice for a sequal. Glad you liked it!WhiteNite - - My funny man! Bleh! Care for a swim? I loved the "ember glow" too.... Sven - - Humbled sir as always by your generously warm replies. I agree...the ending this has does seem suitable, 'eh? Thank you!Jeffrey - - Humbled AGAIN! I don't know if you'd call it talent, but OK! Thank you sir for your constant support in my writing. Am I still your favorite? hehehe Robert - - (holding hand over your "little" mouth until you HUSH!) I KNOW you didn't just say that! (throwing photos in the trash!) LOL That's where they are, btw! I write ALOT of late, just picking and choosing what I share, is all. I have so much inspiration right now, I'm swimming in it! hehe It's amazing how just one right decision in one's life can turn everything around for the best, and I do mean everything! I thank God every day that I'm so stubborn and head strong. Because of that, I am steaming full ahead to true happiness! When you take your eyes off of God, and look into darkness, I believe you can expect to be "lost" for a time. Love you for your always being there.bobbycat - - Thank you! "Story telling" is indeed the path I'm currently taking, and I'm enjoying it too! I find great satisfaction in weaving something from my heart, and somehow finding a way to put it on paper as a Tale...Corinne - - hehe I almost used that "switch" in my title, but thought naah....everyone will think I have a problem being grammatically correct! LOL Glad you liked this one too! Severn - - *curtsies* Glad you enjoyed this...Hope all is well with you dear! Thrilled to see you involved more here too! Moderator 'eh? Lucky you! Fantasies enrich our lives to the fullest, but true satisfaction comes from creating your own story in the real world! Live out your fantasies and make your life a storybook with beautiful pictures!! -poetFemme |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Uh..."making love aquatically". That would make the trip worthwhile in itself! A Merman! if they exist, then, it stands to reason that Mermaids are out there also. If you "sea" one, hehe, send her my way. ~~nice writing pFF~~ |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
hehe Thanks Danny boy! That was one of my favorite lines too! It just came to me, thinking HOW would this man make love to her? (me) A little creativity goes a long way, as I'm not exactly UP on my mermaid/mermen anatomy! hehe I've always wondered, but I don't have to wonder anymore! "They" are exquisitely adaptable. Thanks for the "just hello". Have missed our talks! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderful story...so magical and romantic...I loved every word!! |
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