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~* A Tale - Seafoam & Mermen *~

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poetFemmeFatale
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0 posted 05-18-2000 01:49 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

~*  A Tale - Seafoam & Mermen  *~

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~

She'd walked along the shore all night, barefoot in the sand -
She'd stopped to build a castle tall, alas it wouldn't stand.
Her long hair blowing in the breeze, with seafoam at her feet -
Her dress tail wet with salt, she decided to retreat...

She turned to walk back to her car, she'd been there half the night -
Walking, searching out her soul, but something wasn't right.
The ocean seemed to beckon her, but she did not know why -
'Twas as if the waters wanted her, & she could feel their cry...

With one last glance back to the sea, she started then to go -
Brushing sand off of her feet, she heard a man cry "No..."
The voice came from the waters deep, within a swelling wave -
Through squinted eyes, she looked & saw the signal that he gave...

Just below the salty surface, light like ember glowed -
Lighting up the area, and then this figure showed.
The upper body of a man rose up from waters blue -
With arms stretched out toward her there, a breeze between them blew...

His eyes of deepest ocean green, seemed to pull her near -
He smiled then, a handsome smile, she walked to him - no fear.
She stood there at the waters edge, the seafoam swirling round -
Something magic in the air, like music, yet no sound...

He beckoned her to come to him, she dove in without thought -
And swam out fast to meet him - all her ponderings forgot.
She broke the surface, took a breath & there before her eyes -
Was a dark & brazen merman, but it came as no surprise...

She had heard of such a creature, yet her eyes had never seen -
His features so magnificent, so handsome in moonbeam.
A soft light on his glistening skin, his eyes so sultry deep -
The way his eyes looked through her soul, nearly made her weep...

Why would such a creature fair, want to summon her?
Was he the one meant for her love, or just a messenger?
He took her in his arms, held her tight & kissed her lips -
Then lightly traced across her eyes, her mouth, with fingertips...

She'd never known a man so strong, who touched so tenderly -
And just her luck, the one she found, lived deep beneath the sea!
She smiled at the thought of it, but knew that he would stay -
As long as he could, here with her, to be with her this way...

He finally spoke, his voice so deep, lingered in her ears -
He said, "I've watched you many times, I've swam here in your tears..."
"You've nearly cried this ocean full, I've tasted all your pain,
I've breathed the emptiness you feel, it falls on me like rain."

"I know you come here often, and I've watched you from afar..."
"You've walked my shore so many times - wondering who you are."
With that, he kissed her lips again, her face in both his hands -
~At last, a man who knows her heart & truly understands...~

He said, "Swim with me here tonight, I'll take you far below,
into waters warm & heavenly & lit with ember glow..."
"I'll show you depths you've never known, here deep within my sea -
Be with me now, complete me, we'll make love aquatically..."

His smile broad, assuring her, she gave him thus, her hand -
She glanced back o'er her shoulder - one last look toward the land.
He gave her breath, his mouth on hers, his touch pure ecstasy -
With moonlight in their eyes - they disappeared beneath the sea...

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~

-poetFemmeFatale
May 17, 2000


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poetFemmeFatale
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1 posted 05-18-2000 01:55 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

  Sorry guys, I just couldn't wrap it up!  Argh!  These "tales" I write of now, just get too darn long for their own good!  LOL  To any of you who made it all the way through, I APPLAUDE YOU!     You're all fabulous!  
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He finally spoke, his voice so deep, lingered in her ears -
He said, "I've watched you many times, I've swam here in your tears..."
"You've nearly cried this ocean full, I've tasted all your pain,
I've breathed the emptiness you feel, it falls on me like rain."

---------------
GEN THIS IS STUNNING!!!
you have outdone your self...
and im convinced you were a mermaid in another life. *smile*
please let me sharpen your colored pencils  for this one...
it just has to be illustrated.
later fantasy-gator
jm
netswan
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3 posted 05-18-2000 05:40 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Oh, my, oh my. Femme, I was going to read
one last poem before shutting down for the
night. Saw yours and thought, oh no a long
one ---------THIS was worth the unblurring
of my eyes -- I am so glad I read it.

Clever Girl

netswan
Kit McCallum
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4 posted 05-18-2000 06:01 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

I absolutely loved this PoetFemme!  Such a flowing story, and so well told, from beginning to end!  You made me feel as if I knew these two ... and I didn't want it to end!  Will you write a "part 2" for us???  Please???  I loved this!

Best wishes,
/Kit
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5 posted 05-18-2000 03:17 PM       View Profile for WhiteNite   Email WhiteNite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhiteNite's Home Page   View IP for WhiteNite

Bleh... how many time do I have to tell you that your stuff is never too long? =)  Very cool poem.  I liked the imagery.. the ember glow and all.. very cool.  Thanks for the read. =)  --Dave

 "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment.
Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott


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6 posted 05-18-2000 10:27 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Gen,
    this is just amazing. . . there really isn't another word to describe it. . . and you don't have to "finish" it. . . let my mind wander. . .let me make up my own conclusions to this wonderful "tale". . . I can think of many. . .

And it's really not that long. . .

----------------------------------------------------------



 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Jeffrey Carter
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7 posted 05-18-2000 10:30 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Gen, Girl you just keep surprising me with your talent....this is absolutely amazing

I'm with Kit....hope there's a part 2 coming  

Anything this well written could never be too long  

All my love,
Jeffrey

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

RSEvans
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8 posted 05-19-2000 11:18 AM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

Now this would have been a good place to post that picture of you holding the seaweed...lol...but I digress.  This is stunning!  I never think you write too much but sometimes I think you don't write enough.  "Do all that is in thine heart..." Gen dear, and we will consume it utterly.  Peace
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9 posted 05-19-2000 02:02 PM       View Profile for bobbycat   Email bobbycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bobbycat

WOW--this was so beautiful!!!!!  I am awe-struck by your story-telling talent!! Excellent poem!  

Christina =^..^=
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10 posted 05-19-2000 07:04 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Lovely tail, I mean tale!  

All kidding aside, this is right up my alley, my kind of poetic story!  Keep 'em coming!

Corinne
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11 posted 05-19-2000 07:10 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

WOW!

This quite took my breath away Femme dear....

Wow.

Excellent...

K
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Janet - - You're the best, and yes, I've been referred to before as something of the sea - an evil mermaid if you will.    I guess because I lead with my head, and not my tail !  LOL  Btw, I'm working on the illustrations now and WOW, I want to thank you again for that idea!  The combination is astounding!  Take care girl!

netswan - - hehe  Thank you for focusing those pupils for this one!  I know that lengthy poetry in not really preferred here, where time is of the essence, but it's hard to write a "story" in just a few lines!    I try to make it worth the reader's while...

Kit McCallum - - Part 2....hhmm....I'm still working on Part 2 to Willowglades, however, this one would be my 2nd choice for a sequal.    Glad you liked it!

WhiteNite - - My funny man!  Bleh!     Care for a swim?  I loved the "ember glow" too....

Sven - - Humbled sir as always by your generously warm replies.    I agree...the ending this has does seem suitable, 'eh?  Thank you!

Jeffrey - - Humbled AGAIN!     I don't know if you'd call it talent, but OK!     Thank you sir for your constant support in my writing.  Am I still your favorite?  hehehe  

Robert - - (holding hand over your "little" mouth until you HUSH!)     I KNOW you didn't just say that!  (throwing photos in the trash!)  LOL  That's where they are, btw!     I write ALOT of late, just picking and choosing what I share, is all.     I have so much inspiration right now, I'm swimming in it!  hehe  It's amazing how just one right decision in one's life can turn everything around for the best, and I do mean everything!  I thank God every day that I'm so stubborn and head strong.  Because of that, I am steaming full ahead to true happiness!  When you take your eyes off of God, and look into darkness, I believe you can expect to be "lost" for a time.  Love you for your always being there.

bobbycat - - Thank you!  "Story telling" is indeed the path I'm currently taking, and I'm enjoying it too!    I find great satisfaction in weaving something from my heart, and somehow finding a way to put it on paper as a Tale...

Corinne - - hehe  I almost used that "switch" in my title, but thought naah....everyone will think I have a problem being grammatically correct!  LOL  Glad you liked this one too!

Severn - - *curtsies*  Glad you enjoyed this...Hope all is well with you dear!  Thrilled to see you involved more here too!  Moderator 'eh?  Lucky you!     

Fantasies enrich our lives to the fullest, but true satisfaction comes from creating your own story in the real world!  Live out your fantasies and make your life a storybook with beautiful pictures!!  -poetFemme
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13 posted 05-20-2000 11:15 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Uh..."making love aquatically".  That would make the trip worthwhile in itself!
A Merman!  if they exist, then, it stands to reason that Mermaids are out there also.  If you "sea" one, hehe, send her my way.
~~nice writing pFF~~
poetFemmeFatale
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14 posted 05-20-2000 01:01 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

hehe  Thanks Danny boy!  That was one of my favorite lines too!  It just came to me, thinking HOW would this man make love to her?  (me)  
A little creativity goes a long way, as I'm not exactly UP on my mermaid/mermen anatomy!  hehe  I've always wondered, but I don't have to wonder anymore!  "They" are exquisitely adaptable.     Thanks for the "just hello".  Have missed our talks!  
Martie
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15 posted 05-20-2000 06:23 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Wonderful story...so magical and romantic...I loved every word!!
 
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