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A Romantic Heart
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0 posted 05-18-2000 01:25 AM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for A Romantic Heart

Listen to the rain beating,
drop, drop,
Listen to the clock ticking,
Tick tock, tick tock,
Listen to the birds tweeting,
Tweet, tweet,
Listen to the crickets singing,
Tweak,tweak,
Hear my heart beating?



[This message has been edited by A Romantic Heart (edited 05-19-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Millette A. (Lester) Addison - All Rights Reserved
Danny Holloway
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1 posted 05-18-2000 01:10 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

This is a cute poem.  Very creative!
~~nice writing~~


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brian madden
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2 posted 05-18-2000 02:11 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

that was really lovely, clever and cute.  
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3 posted 05-18-2000 07:20 PM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

Nice poem!!!!!!
Lone Wolf
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4 posted 05-18-2000 08:27 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

RH,
Hope that heart of yours is not really bleeding, my friend.  Love your poem...short and sweet.  Excellent concept!!  
LW
A Romantic Heart
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5 posted 05-19-2000 11:16 PM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

Thanks for your replies! sometimes short is sweeter!
Parker
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6 posted 05-20-2000 01:48 AM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

So to listen to your heart beating, I would have to put my ear to your chest.....  
Alrighty then. I'm listening.
Too much running or something I must be getting a hormone testosteron overload.
and yes I can't spell and to lazy to look it up in the dictionary, but I'm still listening. I think I hear a beat.... well maybe not, just a little longer.  
Danny Holloway
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7 posted 05-20-2000 11:26 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

I know i responded to this once, but i found myself coming back for another read because it is so touching in simplicity, and so nicely written.....so back up it goes, listen to it soaring!
poetFemmeFatale
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8 posted 05-20-2000 01:20 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

** big nice sigh ***   Very nice girl!  Short, but definately sweet.     
Ethan Halo
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9 posted 05-20-2000 03:22 PM       View Profile for Ethan Halo   Email Ethan Halo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ethan Halo's Home Page   View IP for Ethan Halo

i took this one way when i first read it. i thought it was a little bit of anrgy pleading. i thought that, of all the romantic time your spending with this whoever, YOU aren't being heard.

then i read it again after reading the replies, and i thought this. the both of you (assuming this is written to/about a special someone) can hear each other in everything. even the beating of each others hearts in the simple rhythms of your surrounding.

now i can't decide which perception i liked better! i dug it.

 We all got somethin' we need to atone for.
A Romantic Heart
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10 posted 05-20-2000 06:07 PM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

Parker...it is beating so loud that you don't have to put your head to my chest...so loud that it over rides every sound, every poem, distraction around...Yes you do hear a beat...just recite some more of your beautiful poetry me likes it alot!

Danny..you amaze me...your so sweet and kind..thanks for always reading my poems, I appreciate you!

Jen...your poetry is so creative lately, I am alot like you, like you said before, I have an imaginary muse to inspire me...but there are some here that iinspire me also..Thanks for reading

Ethan...you read my thoughts and my heart, it is a two sided poem, and it depends on which way your heart is seeing it...you saw both sides and my choice is the latter explanation, thanks for your reply
Aimster
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11 posted 05-20-2000 06:35 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

RH--

i liked this one a lot! u are quite creative with your poetry. i like the different ways you get your points across. this one had a upbeat note to it and made me smile. thanks much!

take care,
Amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
A Romantic Heart
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12 posted 05-22-2000 06:24 AM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

Amy..sorry bout that, you snuck in there, Thanks for being so sweet, to say that about my poetry,I am humbled, Thank you for reading, helping me to feel  that my poems mean something to someone..Glad to have made you smile
 
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