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~Better Days~ New Horizons challenge, Jeffery and LW

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Janet Marie
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0 posted 05-18-2000 01:21 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Janet Marie

~Better Days~

Well, they say the road to hell is paved with good intentions,
I've walked this road burdened ...
with secrets and baggage that I cant mention.
I've paid the price too many times now ... for someone else's sins,
and I know all the games, and I know just cause you play by the rules ...
sure as hell don't mean your gonna win.
I have spent a lifetime trying to get back the things they took away,
and I learned something's they took from me, are simply gone to stay.
It took years to even begin ... to ever let myself feel trust ...
to learn the difference between truth and lies, tired alibis, love and lust.
I always knew I could do better than the examples that they set,
I just refuse to be like them ... I haven't lost this bet, yet.
So I cut all my losses and broke free of the ties that bind,
I set out to find what was left of me, and to leave all this pain behind.
Some days it does get hard, the voices still haunt me ...
and I'm still learning that I am the only one who can truly set ~ME~ free.
So I try to look forward and let go of all the sorrow,
I refuse to let them have a hold on me ... they cant have my tomorrows.
I can walk this road of life and not lose my own way ...
I will have my run at the sun, and when I'm tired all I need to do is pray.
So here's to NEW HORIZONS ... to breaking free and rising above ...
here's to poetry ... true friends ... and here's to unconditional love.
Here's to better days ... to kissing fate ... and dancing with destiny ...
here's to happy endings ... here's to you ...
and here's to me finally learning to love me.

Janet Marie   5/17/00

thanks for the inspiration Jeffery and Lone Wolf
for this...
and for the idea of writing with someone else...
your poems together inspired me and Brian Madden to write "Celestial Passions"...
and we have plans to write others,
and I also have plan to write with a few other fav poets...
SEE what you started LOL
THANKS.

                      

"no more tears ... left to hide,
we have made it thru a long and lonely nite,
BETTER DAYS ... are on our sides...
well, it looks as though we're doing something right.

*melissa manchester*



[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 05-18-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Janet Marie - All Rights Reserved
Ethan Halo
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1 posted 05-18-2000 01:31 AM       View Profile for Ethan Halo   Email Ethan Halo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ethan Halo's Home Page   View IP for Ethan Halo

Well, they say the road to hell is paved with good intentions,
I've walked this road burdened ...
with secrets and baggage that I cant mention.
I've paid the price too many times now ... for someone else's sins,
----------------
I have spent a lifetime trying to get back the things they took away,
and I learned something's they took from me, are simply gone to stay.
It took years to even begin ...
-------------------------------
  
This was Fantastic!! i loved every bit. i see the motto's and the stories of my life unfolding in your rhymes. this is amazing. i might have to put this in my file. =)
Excellent job.

PS
i wanna do this challenge. where's the info?


 We all got somethin' we need to atone for.

serenity blaze
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2 posted 05-18-2000 01:34 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

since you're writing from my heart again, m'twin...OOOH!  Pick Me Next!  I would so love to sing harmonies with you!   Huh, Can I?  Huh?  Pretty please?
Janet Marie
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3 posted 05-18-2000 01:42 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

thanks Ethan, for such a great reply...I just sent you an Email telling you about challenge...

serenity...
YES BABY...lets DO put our lips together LOL
I would love to write one with ya me twin.
I'll e-mail ya...be thinking about what you want to write about...
something cajun spicy I hope LOL
Tara Simms
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4 posted 05-18-2000 02:01 AM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

Oh, this is perfect!!  You've outdone yourself with this one.  The hope shines through, the dream to have a better life, to finally embrace yourself.  I love it!  This describes my students so well.  Your closing lines really touch my heart.

 It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley


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5 posted 05-18-2000 02:08 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Janet, this is beautiful, as I see lots of soul-researching going on in this one.     That's what I like to call it.  You touched on many sensitive points, but yet, you wrapped it up with such strength, grace and charm, you left me in awe!  Fabulous read, and so glad you were inspired to do such a healing piece.  Bravissimo!  And btw, thank you for sticking it out on my new LONG story!  hehehe  You're the best girl!  Have missed you terrible!  Have had no inspiration, so I've been laying low.     
ellie LeJeune
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6 posted 05-18-2000 06:12 AM       View Profile for ellie LeJeune   Email ellie LeJeune   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ellie LeJeune

Dearest Jan; Are you sure we didn't grow up in the same house? I read this most incredible poem, and I felt like I was reading my life story. Goosebump city!!!
You are so gifted and WOW, this is great!!
Love, Ellie

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Kit McCallum
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7 posted 05-18-2000 06:27 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

This was an excellent response to the challenge Janet Marie ... you've out-done yourself. This was so full of deep emotions, with such a positive outcome. Take care JM, and continue to hold your head high above the challenges you've faced.

Best wishes,
/Kit
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8 posted 05-18-2000 07:10 AM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

My life, your life, the all bleed into one
But soon we shall walk in the sun

A call of hope from beyond the heavens
Let's go to Vegas cuz we'll roll 7's

So Beautiful J.M.!! You tap into every feeling beating within my heart!! Not sure
how ya do it....but my goodness DON'T EVER STOP  ]
Love Ya~ **AW hugs**
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9 posted 05-18-2000 03:04 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

WOW.... and...em...wow....

Each line is a home truth, each one I know and can connect with me, that was amazing, I am stunned to silence.

"I have spent a lifetime trying to get back the things they took away,
and I learned something's they took from me, are simply gone to stay."


"So I cut all my losses and broke free of the ties that bind,
I set out to find what was left of me, and to leave all this pain behind.
Some days it does get hard, the voices still haunt me ...
and I'm still learning that I am the only one who can truly set ~ME~ free.
So I try to look forward and let go of all the sorrow,
I refuse to let them have a hold on me ... they cant have my tomorrows."
These words I know so well, while gazing into your own soul I believe you also saw into mine.  

netswan
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10 posted 05-18-2000 03:21 PM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Janet ---You go Girl!  
Let those ghosts fly off your shoulders
and always enjoy today - and look forward
to tomorrow.

So touching - and well written, of course.

HUGS
netswan
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11 posted 05-18-2000 03:27 PM       View Profile for CSwtThng   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CSwtThng

Beautiful poem.

So you took the road less traveled
And you're better for it now
You've managed to win the battle
That fate would not allow


Again beautifully done!!!!
Effigy
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12 posted 05-18-2000 03:30 PM       View Profile for Effigy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Effigy

very nice. I loved it. extremly well done.
best wishes,
Effigy
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13 posted 05-18-2000 07:43 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Beautifully done. Sometimes the hardest thing in life is to turn and walk towards a new horizon....you capture this feeling quite nicely!  
Lone Wolf
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14 posted 05-18-2000 08:14 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Janet Marie,
You have well exceeded the challenge put before you!!!  Excellent piece!!  I think I speak for Jeffrey too when I say that we are touched to have inspired such beautiful writing!!!  This is amazing!!  You are welsome for the idea of writing with someone else...Jeffrey gets the credit for that one.  It is a lot of fun to do for sure!!  We had a ball with ours and plan to do more.  Glad to have started all this  LOL  You are most welcome and I hope I made the list of poets you would like to write with...love your work!!!  

LW

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15 posted 05-18-2000 08:34 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Perfection of course!!!  Did Gemini help?

Marina
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16 posted 05-18-2000 10:22 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

OMG....I LOVED THIS ONE

Better days are yet to come ..without a doubt

All my love,
Jeffrey

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

Janet Marie
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17 posted 05-19-2000 08:33 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

THANK YOU my treasured poet friends...
seems too many of us relate to hearing those voices from the past... but we are all here together, quiet comfort for each other...
and Better Days on our side...
thank you for such sweet replies of understanding.
take care,
love ya all, jm
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18 posted 05-19-2000 10:58 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

BEG, sounds like you have grabbed life by the tale and your calling your own terms!
It's the only way to fly!  and i believe your about to soar, my poetic Eagle.
      
       with grace and strength
        you write your story
        determined after all
         to have your glory

        on your own two feet
         your ready to stand
       taking fate and destiny
             by the hand

~~excellent writing JM~~
      
      
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19 posted 05-21-2000 04:03 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

jm--

man i go away from passions for a few days and look at all the GOOD stuff i miss. i know im late in responding to this...im late with everything here lately it seems. i apologize to you and to everyone else as well. i LOVED this poem, simply LOVED it! it spoke to me in ways u can't even imagine...or maybe u can. thanks for posting this...and i look forward to reading your collaberation efforts with some of the other fine poets here at passions!

love ya,
amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
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20 posted 05-21-2000 06:29 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

I loved the use of mottos and cliches in this!  Must have been a blast to write!

Corinne
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21 posted 05-21-2000 06:57 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

"To breaking free and rising above..."... It works for me...
EagleOne
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22 posted 05-22-2000 08:44 AM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

Here's to better days Janet....and don't ever give up your tomorrows!

 Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien
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23 posted 05-22-2000 02:48 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Here, here......to new horizons!!!  I hear that.  Great work here....so inspirational...good for you and thanks for sharing this.
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Janet Marie....This is beautiful!!! Here's to chances and to new starts  
 
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