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One Chance ( a new one )

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Ethan Halo
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since 04-28-2000
Posts 820
on the roof again


0 posted 05-18-2000 12:22 AM       View Profile for Ethan Halo   Email Ethan Halo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Ethan Halo's Home Page   View IP for Ethan Halo


one Chance

The caffeine pills won't keep me up forever.
I'll need the Sleep sometime.
Dream the nightmare of your face;
Hear the pretty laugh that makes me cry.
You can have the rest of your life;
take all the time and space you need.
I hate to put any words in your mouth,
but you won't ever talk to me.
I'll never get a second chance
to see if we'd be better or worse.
I'll never get that second chance
because I never got the first.

The Prozac won't pep me up forever.
I'll have to Feel one day.
It's too bad the day that I felt
was when you ripped my heart away.
"You weren't looking for a relationship",
but you've found this "real sweet guy".
It's amazing how you destroy a dream
while looking the dreamer in the eye.
I'll never have that second chance
to say my heart was ready to burst.
I'll never get that second chance
because I never got the first.

The razors won't make me bleed forever.
I'm gonna have to face my Fears.
You'll never remember me but I'll
have the scars as souvenirs.
I promise myself this is the last goodbye.
I promise you're in the past.
I hope that your neck stays healthy;
you jerk your face away so fast.
I'll never get a second chance
to tell you how much it hurts.
Don't think I'll need that second chance;
I said it all with the first.


 We all got somethin' we need to atone for.





[This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 05-18-2000).]
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Janet Marie
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1 posted 05-18-2000 12:32 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

I hate to put any words in your mouth,
but you won't ever talk to me.
I'll never get a second chance
to see if I'd be better or worse.
I'll never get that second chance
because I never got the first.
-----------
It's amazing how you destroy a dream
while looking the dreamer in the eye.
I'll never have that second chance
to say my heart was ready to burst.
I'll never get that second chance
because I never got the first.
--------------
I promise you're in the past.
I hope that your neck stays healthy;
you jerk your face away so fast.
I'll never get a second chance
to tell you how much it hurts.
Don't think I'll need that second chance;
I said it all with the first.
------------

DAMN...this is SO GOOD...
it just rocks with your emotions.
Forget the drugs...
you just need an antidote for the bitter pill and bad taste this one left in your mouth.
SUPERB writing Ethan..you vent with class.
now I have a matching set for my files.
very cool poem...


 It's amazing
How you make your face just like a wall
How you take your heart and turn it off
How I turn my head and you lose it all ...
And it's unnerving
How one move just puts me by myself
There you go just trusting someone else
Now I know I put us both through hell ...
I'm not sayin
That there was nothing wrong
I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me
And I'm not sayin
We ever had the right to hold on
I just didn't wanna let you get away from me.
~MB20~Leave


Ethan Halo
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since 04-28-2000
Posts 820
on the roof again


2 posted 05-18-2000 12:56 AM       View Profile for Ethan Halo   Email Ethan Halo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ethan Halo's Home Page   View IP for Ethan Halo

thanks JM.
glad you like it. i wrote half drunk, and half on NoDoz at 3:30 in the am. i can't believe i even got structure and rhyme... anywho i appreciate the notes. i left some on your poem too.

thanks again!

 We all got somethin' we need to atone for.

 
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