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The Field of Broken Dreams

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CSwtThng
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0 posted 05-17-2000 10:41 PM       View Profile for CSwtThng   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for CSwtThng

The Field of Broken Dreams

I sit alone and think
In the field of broken dreams
Sorting through broken promises
Ripped at the seams

I sit and I wonder
About the trials of life
We waste so much time
Feeling hurtful pain and strife

I try to brush away the tears
From my heavy heart
It's so hard to keep going
When you don't know where to start

I run around in circles
Do I stop or do I begin
In the field of broken dreams
It's a race you never win

People come and people go
But I stay here just the same
Those people will not save me
For it's me they have to blame

Once again I'm all alone
Sitting in the rain
In the field of broken dreams
Lost with all my pain
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Jeffrey Carter
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1 posted 05-17-2000 11:02 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

WOW!!!
Tragically beautiful outpouring of feelings.

My thoughts are with you m'friend.

All my love,
Jeffrey


 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

Holly
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2 posted 05-17-2000 11:44 PM       View Profile for Holly   Email Holly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Holly's Home Page   View IP for Holly


It's great! I love this poem...
-Holly


[This message has been edited by Holly (edited 05-17-2000).]
Denise
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3 posted 05-17-2000 11:47 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very sad yet wonderfully written piece!

Denise
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4 posted 05-17-2000 11:51 PM       View Profile for insect   Email insect   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for insect

Broken dreams may mend
A reach from the hand of a friend
You sew the cost
Tears we're lost

The tear becomes a seam
Patched from a broken dream
The dream weaver hems your fashion
Reopening the door for passion
DiObear
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5 posted 05-18-2000 12:45 AM       View Profile for DiObear   Email DiObear   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DiObear

It's strange to say that I enjoyed reading such a sad poem, but I did.  Thanks for sharing it.
netswan
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6 posted 05-18-2000 04:29 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Very Good -- enjoyed this, even in
all its tragedy.

netswan
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7 posted 05-18-2000 06:37 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

"It's so hard to keep going
When you don't know where to start"
_______
You've started in the best place possible CSwtThing ... I've always found my pen to be my therapy, and you've penned this well ... wonderful poem!

Best wishes,
/Kit
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8 posted 05-18-2000 07:18 AM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

CS* This piece has sadness within it but also realizations that living in pain only brings more pain...you have such a gift.  It's an honor to read your work!

 The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams

~Eleanor Roosevelt~
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9 posted 05-18-2000 07:25 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

SweetThing~
Your meadow of sadness is only
a temporary resting place.

*Insect's reply is the PERFECT cure -

'Broken dreams may mend
A reach from the hand of a friend
You sew the cost
Tears we're lost

The tear becomes a seam
Patched from a broken dream
The dream weaver hems your fashion
Reopening the door for passion'

Brilliant response to a friend in need.
~*Marge*~



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10 posted 05-18-2000 03:13 PM       View Profile for CSwtThng   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CSwtThng

Thanks everyone!

Jeffery Carter-Thank you. I really appreciate it.

Holly- I'm glad you liked it.

Denise- You know your input means a lot to me.

Insect- You added a truly happy ending to a very sad beginning.

DiObear- Thanks you. Great inspiration can come from sadness.

netswan- Thanks for the reply.

Kit- I totally agree. Writing can be the best therapy.

Butterflies_don't_cry- You don't know how much your reply means to me.

Marge- You are right. You can always seem to find someone to listen at Passions.
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11 posted 05-18-2000 07:11 PM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

I like it a lot!!!!!!!!
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