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The Strings of Your Closed Eyes

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Martie
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0 posted 05-17-2000 09:54 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

The Strings of Your Closed Eyes

I could sing this song all day
my love in glorious abandon spreading
across the glass of your blue tune
the length of you I play
on the strings of your closed eyes
with the silky husk of time’s finger tips
that leaks such stories
that my heart weeps blood
and gets tangled in the twisted gossamer.

Dance with me in dreamy dare
in this fragrant rhythm I feel real
and I will pull you to my strength
and you will feed me chocolate
and touch me with your tongued
legs wrapped and pulsing
across the place where a day
becomes a life

and for this time of stars and moons
laughter will be our clothing
and listening will be our food
for this is what I whisper
in my flowing lacy sweep of time
I whisper now is forever
sing to me forever
love me forever.


[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 05-17-2000).]
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Corinne
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1 posted 05-17-2000 10:21 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

So lovely, I especially liked:

"for this is what I whisper
in my flowing lacy sweep of time
I whisper now is forever"

Corinne
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2 posted 05-17-2000 11:07 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Simply magical, Martie, the images you can produce with your words......beautiful
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3 posted 05-17-2000 11:19 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very beautiful, Martie! This flows so smoothly!  

Denise
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4 posted 05-18-2000 06:32 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie~
Whatever you write sings with abandon ...
this plucks the heartstrings too.
What a gal !
Love ya'
~*Marge*~



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5 posted 05-18-2000 06:37 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Martie~
This was a delight to read  
Your last stanza superb.
Tracie~


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It is the harmony of the universe


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magical is the word for this....sigh....wow
Martie
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Thanks Corinne--i'm glad you liked it.

Balladeer--thanks for the magical reply

Denise--You always say such nice things

Marge--Thanks my friend..love right back at ya

Tracie--I'm so glad you found delight in this poem...

Corazon--sure glad to have given you a sigh...thanks.
Elizabeth Santos
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8 posted 05-19-2000 06:03 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Life, Love, Passion, The purpose of Life, all wrapped up in one sweet love song.
Simply Exquisite.
Extraordinary writing
Liz
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Martie, I don't know but this seems a little different for you. Loved the word choices.

These lines kinda jumped out at me...

and you will feed me chocolate
and touch me with your tongued
legs wrapped and pulsing

Well, they were a little to much for me, but i'll get my breath back.

Parker
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Liz--I'm so glad you read this and liked it...thank you for the exquistite, dear friend.

Parker--calm down...and thanks so much for the read.
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Wow oh wow, I can't even explain what all I just experienced while reading this!  Superb, and what a poem!  Talk about taking the reader on a trip!  Well done to say the least!  I think I better go reread it!  hehe  I think some of it went over my blonde highlights!  Whoosh!     
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Martie, that was quiet beautiful. magical, vivid imagery.
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Wonderful Martie!!

Just sings with the knowledge of love and comfort...

Excellent!!

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Martie, once again your poetic sorcery delights my mind...oh so magical, this.

~ Claire

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"and I will pull you to my strength
and you will feed me chocolate
and touch me with your tongued
legs wrapped and pulsing
across the place where a day
becomes a life

and for this time of stars and moons
laughter will be our clothing
and listening will be our food
for this is what I whisper
in my flowing lacy sweep of time
I whisper now is forever
sing to me forever
love me forever."

as much as I liked the entire poem and the beginning - Thes last lines touched me so very much - I felt I had to post them here.
I don't think I need tell you why. Thank you for calling it to my attention.  
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Oh I can't beleive I missed this!
this is so beautiful so magical and the ending lines made me melt.

Love it Martie  

Maree.
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Magnificent!
A jewel of a poem sweetMartie...
*~coco~*
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18 posted 01-06-2005 07:14 AM       View Profile for Ratleader   Email Ratleader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ratleader's Home Page   View IP for Ratleader

Sweet....makes me want to go there...or any place like it, if there is anyplace like it. I wish I'd stumbled upon this poem long ago.

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When the time is right,
this is ripe for a repost.
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I was thinking EXACTLY the same thing.

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