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New Horizon - in response to Jeff's and lone wolf's challenge

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brian madden
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0 posted 05-17-2000 05:27 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for brian madden

Through the gaps in my venetian blinds
my hand slowly wipes off the dust of all past lives.
I am gazing at eternal sky, and a dew drown meadow,
to plant my spirit and bury the seeds of my sorrow.

Hold myself naked before the mirror,
the icy dew kisses my skin with a fresh tremor
View my ideology proudly,vanity's the perfect sin.
My agony dies to cultivate a beauty held within.

Optimism in the waking hours of dawn,
I feel alive since the first moment I was born.
Purified in waters of a new horizon
I am harmony, a sensitivity to celebrate on tongue.

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Janet Marie
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1 posted 05-17-2000 05:38 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Through the gaps in my venetian blinds
my hand slowly wipes off the dust of all past lives.
I am gazing at eternal sky, and a dew drown meadow,
to plant my spirit and bury the seeds of my sorrow.
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View my ideology proudly,vanity's the perfect sin.
My agony dies to cultivate a beauty held within.

Optimism in the waking hours of dawn,
I feel alive since the first moment I was born
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OH MAN...
I dont even know how to respond to this.
YOU went WAY deep for this.
this is awesome brian, and so very cool.

I was gonna try this challenge but there aint no way I can touch this.
excellent writing...
poet-genius-you are.
later-bri-gator
jm
Danny Holloway
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2 posted 05-17-2000 06:45 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Brian, agree with JM, this is wonderful writing.  Nice response to the challenge!
Kit McCallum
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3 posted 05-17-2000 06:49 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Wonderful Brian ... excellent response to the challenge ... I enjoyed this!

Best wishes,
/Kit
Lone Wolf
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4 posted 05-17-2000 10:34 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Brian,

Challenge exceeded!!  Wow!!!  Powerful and deep thoughts emit from this piece.  Just wonderful!!!  Loved it!  

LW
brian madden
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5 posted 05-18-2000 01:21 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Thanks guys for all your cooments, you are all too kind.   It looks like my writers block is finally over, I just finished another poem today. Heh Janet, oh you are sure a kidder. I know that you could write something in your sleep that would overshadow my little poem, come on take on the challenge I know your positive attitude would suit the task perfectly, I had to watch barney the dinosuaur to be in a happy mood so I could write the poem.    
netswan
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6 posted 05-18-2000 05:35 PM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Wonderful meeting of the challenge,
Brian --)

netswan

 
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