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I was naught

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Corazon
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0 posted 05-17-2000 10:05 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corazon

I was naught

I was naught
but a season
of fuel for your
fire
naught but tinder to stoke
your passions flame
my kisses a fan
to erotic embers
my pulsing softness a spark
to light your days
my recesses
a warm promise to take
again and again
in your dreams

but my reasoning
felt need to be heard
posing questions of
temporary insanity
voicing the folly of my chosen path
pointing out my imminent
flaming demise
my ego seconded the motion
and put voice to my desires for
more
together they overrode my
heart
words spoken
steps taken
tearful endings
have now rendered
the path to you
null and void
and
I will force belief
that this is best
as my mind does reinforce with
hurt filled remembrances
that my empty arms would so easily
forget
for betray me they would
fling the door wide
at your knocking
and be naught for you
again

© Copyright 2000 zoe d. - All Rights Reserved
wayoutwalt
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1 posted 05-17-2000 10:09 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

i liked where this one went to teach a lesson well done
angelswing
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2 posted 05-17-2000 10:14 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

Great poem, it used a lot of my favourite metaphors such as love and flames . I liked it very much and have many of the feelings that you are describing .
L.of.L. Tom .


 Insanity is a perfectly normal responce to an abnormal world -R.D.Laing.-
suthern
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3 posted 05-17-2000 10:19 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

That one knock can instantly eradicate all the resolve forged through months of tears. For we can't deny hope that someday we'll be something to the one who is our everything. *S* Beautifully done, Corazon!
Corazon
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4 posted 05-17-2000 10:26 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

thanks walt...and yep, you hit it right, I did learn a lesson with this one...sometimes lessons hurt though...

thank you angelswing...glad it touched you

suthern, my poems do not sit well with me til I get your "read and reply"...thanks for the "well done"....means much to me you know?
suthern
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5 posted 05-17-2000 12:08 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Ya mean someone pays attention to what I say? *G* Heaven help us all!!! *G*

You know how it pains me to compliment you, O&O. *G* But if I had your talent, I'd be bombarding this place with poems! *G*
doreen peri
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6 posted 05-17-2000 12:30 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

publish this!
it gave me chills
hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 05-17-2000 12:54 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Let me say just a few words my friend...you far under estimate your talent for poetry. I have to second doreen on this one...PUBLISH!!! Not only this one though, this one and so many of your other works. Your poems don't quietly beg for attention...they stand up and shout "READ ME NOW!!!"   Great poem!!
Denise
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8 posted 05-17-2000 01:29 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I agree, Corazon, you do have a special gift!
Very well done!

Denise
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9 posted 05-17-2000 03:00 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I will add my voice to those who scream "publish". Your poetry is extremely hard-hitting, real and revealing. It is hard to get enough.

I was hoping it was a typo and you forgot to add the "y". NUTS! Well, maybe next time  

Corazon
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10 posted 05-17-2000 04:06 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

well i must say I am flattered most by the quality and talent of the poets who read and comment...you make me feel good with your
comments thank you so much  
and yep that's a definate *someday*...I will get that book on publishing and find somewhere to send  

and bal....lolol@forgot the "y"....  
JamesMichael
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11 posted 05-17-2000 05:13 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

A fabulous style so smooth and enjoyable to read.   James
Corazon
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12 posted 05-18-2000 09:18 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

jmlee...thank you so much, I write my poems just as is, as they tumble out of my head, I couldn't tell you why or how I choose the line breaks, they just feel right...so for you to say that makes me feel like I am doing something right  
Marge Tindal
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13 posted 05-18-2000 08:53 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Corazon~
Very enjoyable read.
Much to like about this one for sure.
~*Marge*~


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rene
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14 posted 05-18-2000 08:55 PM       View Profile for rene   Email rene   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rene

you speak your mind in the most enforceful way, well done
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