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My Little Closet

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DiObear
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since 04-30-2000
Posts 68
Switzerland


0 posted 05-17-2000 02:30 AM       View Profile for DiObear   Email DiObear   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DiObear

As a young girl
I took all my new
cotton print dresses
discount tags still hanging
from plastic strings
and moved down the hall
into the closet
where the dark wool coats
and rain slickers
kept me company

They never scolded
never tattled
and never
drew a line
across the room
in neon pink chalk
that should never
be crossed
even though the door
was on the other side

I sat there
among the shoes
streaked green
from fresh cut grass
and dreamed
of the day
when the noise
would stop

Where endless dreams
painted across the sky
in pastel watercolors
wet on wet
would flow down
towards my feet
and gentle peace
would finally
be mine forever

And now
as a woman
I look around me
my blond haired
pixie dreams
screaming from above
over the voices
of the well painted characters
in the latest novel
laying half read
on the nightstand

Empty cans
of diet Coke
looking squat
beside a cool bottle
of Leinenkugel beer
on a dresser full of dust
and overfilled ashtrays
concealing the water stains
brown with age
that streak through
the paintings
of my childhood dreams

Maybe Iíve been
around the block
a few too many times
but I havenít drifted far
from the closet
at the end of the hallway
crowded in quiet comfort
and innocent thoughts
of a watercolor serenity
painted in shades
of youthful optimism

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Irie
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since 12-01-1999
Posts 1526
Washington State


1 posted 05-17-2000 02:36 AM       View Profile for Irie   Email Irie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irie

Oh Man!
I can't really find the words to reply to this poem.
Wonderful, beautiful? Doesn't seem quite right.
I did find this very well expressed and I really enjoyed the read.
I'm sorry I can't tell you more, I'm at a loss for words,
and no, it's not a bad thing  
Marge Tindal
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2 posted 05-17-2000 03:07 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

DiObear~
Hon, this is marvelous.
Such vivid imagery you've brought forth
upon the page ...
This is really good.
Really, really good.
~*Marge*~


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Sudhir Iyer
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since 04-26-2000
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium


3 posted 05-17-2000 03:47 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

I think I will ditto what Marge has said.

Exquisite thoughts, vivid imagery....

Regards,
Sudhir.

 Life is like a painting,
That in an art gallery is left hanging,
Though many come just to look at it,
A very few actually come to enjoy it.
DiObear
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since 04-30-2000
Posts 68
Switzerland


4 posted 05-17-2000 09:51 AM       View Profile for DiObear   Email DiObear   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DiObear

Irie - For someone at a loss for words, you said so much and I appreciate it greatly.

Marge - Your responses are always special to me.  Thank you.

Sudhir - Sometimes when I want to respond to a poem I've read in this forum, it seems like everyone else has already said what I wanted to say.  Next time I will add my own 'ditto' becuase I will remember how much I appreciated your 'ditto' to Marge's words.  Thank you.
Denise
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5 posted 05-17-2000 01:04 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I'll ditto all above as well! I enjoyed this very much!

Denise
Martie
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6 posted 05-17-2000 02:16 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Very well written--poignant and sad and full of feeling and so well expressed with sensory perfection.  Oh, did I say I enjoyed it?  Well, I did!!
DiObear
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Switzerland


7 posted 05-17-2000 11:07 PM       View Profile for DiObear   Email DiObear   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DiObear

Denise - Thanks for the ditto.  I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Martie - I started to write the poem out of a feeling of disappointment.  It ended up writing itself with notes on hopes and dreams.  But the sadness was still in there somewhere.  Thanks for pointing it out.
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