navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #7 » Emotions
Open Poetry #7
Post A Reply Post New Topic Emotions Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Holly
Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 127
Arkansas

0 posted 2000-05-16 07:50 PM


-Emotions-

a innocent exchange of niceties has left me so perplexed
every waking moment is filled with thoughts of him and i reflect
so filled with worry of how this came to be
i don't know how such feelings consumed me

how did he get under my skin
at exactly what point did i breath him in?

it seems my rational thoughts have no place here
emotions running from love, care, to utter fear
maybe i should just leave these thoughts of him behind
in hopes to end this torement in my own mind

is it possible-could this be he has given to me the sweetest gift to ever be?

This was a poem that was co-wrote by a friend online...a very good friend. He continues to contribute to my life, my being, my spirit, my existence. How lucky I am to be in the mix of such great people.
-Holly




 

© Copyright 2000 Holly - All Rights Reserved
Dawn Eclipse
Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637
The Horsehead Nebula
1 posted 2000-05-16 09:52 PM


That was a wonderful poem.     There are some great questions for insight on a person in there.  Excelent work.

 "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying."
Harry Anderson, "Night Court"

*Cassandra Roseen*

fool
Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 61

2 posted 2000-05-16 10:22 PM


"at exactly what point did i breath him in?"
I love this line,good poem holly.

Holly
Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 127
Arkansas
3 posted 2000-05-16 10:25 PM


Thank you so much! I have always viewed my own work as "too emotional", so it's nice to hear others don't think so. Have you ever felt like you took a breath and completely inhaled someone? That's it in a nutshell.

Thank you again,
-Holly

CMGrimm
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685
USA
4 posted 2000-05-16 11:05 PM




yep...I just did.....

very beautiful work Holly.

chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.



Holly
Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 127
Arkansas
5 posted 2000-05-16 11:08 PM


Chris,
Thank you very much for taking a breath and inhaling. hehe

-Holly

bobbycat
Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233
USA
6 posted 2000-05-16 11:22 PM


I will definitely have to agree.....that "breathing him in" line was totally awesome!!  Nice work....and I know exactly what you mean!!!!!    

Christina =^..^=

Sven
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Laureate
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
7 posted 2000-05-17 12:22 PM


Holly,
      your work is indeed not "too emotional". . . in fact, it's quite good. . .

Very insightful. . . taking a breath of someone. . . it can be wonderful. . . especially if you don't exhale. . .

Thanks for this breath of you Holly. . .

------------------------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #7 » Emotions

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary