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wayoutwalt
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I feel shadows enclosing my vision
Encircling my sight and fading me fast
One last ponder of my indecision
Iíll walk through the haze thatís ever to last

It is dark here and the ground isnít flat
Up a hill and down a valley I go
Iíve faith in my pocket and love 'neath my hat
A twig in the ground could sprawl me just so

Itís cold in the cavern blackness surrounds me
I will leave nothing but prints on the walls
And when some soul saddens they found me
Theyíll be too far for one to answer their calls

The sudden change of elation comes forth
The cavernís still there but is hidden quite well
Youíll see me clicking my heels toward North
Migration is instinct this condition is hell



© Copyright 2000 Walt Burns - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 05-16-2000 01:04 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Walt!! This is wonderful...I think it's one of your best. You described your emotions perfectly. Keep writing, sir!  
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2 posted 05-16-2000 01:20 AM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

A real keeper here Walt....Emotional movement at its best

 A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her.


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3 posted 05-16-2000 02:08 AM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky

Have a brew on me TexasWalt.
I have to tell you I admire the line:

"Iíve faith in my pocket and love 'neath my hat"

that's real down home to me...



 If I could paint a portrait, of this life in which I've led, and somehow sketch a story, of the visions in my head, I'd start out with a canvas, stretched tightly in a frame, and in the bottom corner, I'd leave room to sign my name. (Michelle A. Bartley)
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4 posted 05-16-2000 07:56 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Walt~
I'm reminded of 'I can see clearly now'
Nicely done -
I liked David's line of 'emotional movement'
I think that says what I also found in this piece.
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wayoutwalt
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5 posted 05-16-2000 03:11 PM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

thanx guys i was feelin a bit down but i think im better already yuh
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6 posted 05-16-2000 03:44 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Yes, very well done, Walt! I'm glad that you are feeling better now!

Denise
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7 posted 05-17-2000 12:31 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

thank you denise im just too serious here lately
Mistikman
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8 posted 05-17-2000 10:02 AM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Great work here walt, I couldnt even comprehend the emotional rollercoaster you have to live with. Glad yer feeling better now though.
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wow...*clicking her heels and joining the North Migration*.....wow!
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10 posted 05-17-2000 10:09 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

Walt - you should be serious more often, it has inspired a great poem ( and that isn't to say that your less serious poems arn't as good, cause I love them all ) . I really enjoyed reading it and stoping to think for a moment afterwards on what your saying and how it matches my mood perfectly .
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11 posted 05-17-2000 10:47 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Though sad, you've written some wonderful poems here. But remember bud...always keep your eyes on Jesus.  I'm sorry you feel so bummed, wish we could have talked last night but I had to go.  
I too love the line "faith in my pocket and love under my hat. Excellent!





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12 posted 05-17-2000 01:21 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Yowsers...I do believe I like this serious side of you  
wayoutwalt
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13 posted 05-17-2000 11:51 PM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

thank you all for being supportive and i love the pic white dove
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14 posted 05-18-2000 02:41 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

May I join your fan club?  
Nan
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15 posted 05-18-2000 07:14 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I'm expanding that favorite part to the whole second stanza, my friend... The "twig on the ground" is pretty darned good as well..
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