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Closer to the Sky

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Skyfyre
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0 posted 05-15-2000 10:59 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Skyfyre

Closer to the Sky

When comes the turn, the parting from the way
Whereon in customary beat did fall
The tread of dreaming child to woman grown,
The soul abandons all it’s ever known
To seek the sound of new horizon’s call:
That distant place where dawns a brighter day.

When what was life, was comfortable, was real,
And held a safe familiarity,
Now lies abandoned on this foreign road,
Beloved scenes with careful reverence stowed
In vivid hues, to paint the memory,
Are all that years of journey’s past reveal.

All else behind, and only hopes to lead,
A wary faith to pave the new-made path,
And dreams half-formed to set my bearings by,
I mark the goal as “closer to the sky...”
While in the distance fades the aftermath:
The roots uptorn, unleashing chance’s seed.



 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

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1 posted 05-15-2000 11:10 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Superb Kess,
            this rings out with the expectations of the journey not yet taken. . . the hopes and the fears. . . the journey to the "New Horizons" not yet found. . .

Excellent my friend. . .

-------------------------------------------------------------



 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Janet Marie
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2 posted 05-16-2000 12:55 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

All else behind, and only hopes to lead,
A wary faith to pave the new-made path,
And dreams half-formed to set my bearings by,
I mark the goal as “closer to the sky...”
While in the distance fades the aftermath:
The roots uptorn, unleashing chance’s seed.
---------------

Kess, this is amazing...
SO well thought out and written,
expressions from way deep...
perfection of emotions.

heres to roads not yet taken...
may they lead you back to you...
and closer to the sky.
take care, jm

 It's amazing
How you make your face just like a wall
How you take your heart and turn it off
How I turn my head and you lose it all ...
And it's unnerving
How one move just puts me by myself
There you go just trusting someone else
Now I know I put us both through hell ...
I'm not sayin
That there was nothing wrong
I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me
And I'm not sayin
We ever had the right to hold on
I just didn't wanna let you get away from me.
~MB20~Leave


Christopher
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3 posted 05-17-2000 12:37 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

"unleashing chance’s seed."

For isn't that life after all Kess? A chance... doing, trying, living, dying. It all comes under chance, for there are no guarentees int his life.

Well written my friend, I feel you.
Michael
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4 posted 05-20-2000 09:20 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Kess,

I have read this a few times now... I am lost to words with this one.  I feel great yearing and great questioning in reading this.  Feelings I can only too well relate to.  

"dreams half-formed to set my bearings by"

Love that line.  The title, alone, I found very intriguing.  Sounds like just the place to be.


Michael

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5 posted 05-20-2000 10:46 PM       View Profile for David2   Email David2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for David2

Skyfyre,
   Your work is wonderful! I love the way you use words to communicate emotions and ideas but I think I am most in awe of your exquisite mechanics. Your work is incredibly esy to read as every line is perfectly metered. Beautiful!
                David2
Denise
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6 posted 05-21-2000 12:11 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Superbly written, as always, Kess!

Denise
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7 posted 05-21-2000 01:07 PM       View Profile for Dawn Eclipse   Email Dawn Eclipse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dawn Eclipse

Skyfyre,

That was a beautiful piece.  You have a wonderful talent.  
"To seek the sound of new horizon’s call:  That distant place where dawns a brighter day."  Just beautiful.



 "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying."
Harry Anderson, "Night Court"

*Cassandra Roseen*
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8 posted 05-21-2000 02:10 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Skyfyre, a stunning piece, beautiful images.
I hope that you have a safe journey to your new horizon.



The tread of dreaming child to woman grown,
The soul abandons all it’s ever known

Now lies abandoned on this foreign road,
Beloved scenes with careful reverence stowed
In vivid hues, to paint the memory,
Are all that years of journey’s past reveal.

All else behind, and only hopes to lead,
A wary faith to pave the new-made path,
And dreams half-formed to set my bearings by,



 "Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? "
Douglas Adams
Sudhir Iyer
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9 posted 05-21-2000 02:30 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

I mark the goal as “closer to the sky...”
While in the distance fades the aftermath:
The roots uptorn, unleashing chance’s seed.
... brilliant words, skyfyre, simply brilliant...

If I may add something that comes to my confused head...

Led myself into a distant path, marking horizon
Following unmarked foorsteps, I warily tread
The distant moorings came even so near, a run,
Taking me ever so close, no longer afraid,

Reached foothills of a mountain tall, looked upwards saw the sun,
At the top, feeling closest to the sky, flagged - a red one,
Feeling a sense of utter happiness, my goal,
has been reached, to be closer to heaven
......

Regards,
Sudhir.

 Life is like a painting,
That in an art gallery is left hanging,
Though many come just to look at it,
A very few actually come to enjoy it.
Martie
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10 posted 05-21-2000 02:39 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Kess, I always look forward to your poetry and the beauty and feeling of this piece is no exception.  Lovely work!
Meadowmuse
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11 posted 05-21-2000 02:50 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Kess, to say that your ability surprises me would be an untruth...yet, I remain, each time, amazed at your gift. Wonderful, this treasure...

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

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