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Closer to the Sky
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Closer to the Sky |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap 
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Closer to the Sky When comes the turn, the parting from the way Whereon in customary beat did fall The tread of dreaming child to woman grown, The soul abandons all it’s ever known To seek the sound of new horizon’s call: That distant place where dawns a brighter day. When what was life, was comfortable, was real, And held a safe familiarity, Now lies abandoned on this foreign road, Beloved scenes with careful reverence stowed In vivid hues, to paint the memory, Are all that years of journey’s past reveal. All else behind, and only hopes to lead, A wary faith to pave the new-made path, And dreams half-formed to set my bearings by, I mark the goal as “closer to the sky...” While in the distance fades the aftermath: The roots uptorn, unleashing chance’s seed. Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Superb Kess, this rings out with the expectations of the journey not yet taken. . . the hopes and the fears. . . the journey to the "New Horizons" not yet found. . . Excellent my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
All else behind, and only hopes to lead, A wary faith to pave the new-made path, And dreams half-formed to set my bearings by, I mark the goal as “closer to the sky...” While in the distance fades the aftermath: The roots uptorn, unleashing chance’s seed. --------------- Kess, this is amazing... SO well thought out and written, expressions from way deep... perfection of emotions. heres to roads not yet taken... may they lead you back to you... and closer to the sky. take care, jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving How one move just puts me by myself There you go just trusting someone else Now I know I put us both through hell ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me And I'm not sayin We ever had the right to hold on I just didn't wanna let you get away from me. ~MB20~Leave |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
"unleashing chance’s seed." For isn't that life after all Kess? A chance... doing, trying, living, dying. It all comes under chance, for there are no guarentees int his life. Well written my friend, I feel you. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Kess, I have read this a few times now... I am lost to words with this one. I feel great yearing and great questioning in reading this. Feelings I can only too well relate to. "dreams half-formed to set my bearings by" Love that line. The title, alone, I found very intriguing. Sounds like just the place to be. Michael |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Skyfyre, Your work is wonderful! I love the way you use words to communicate emotions and ideas but I think I am most in awe of your exquisite mechanics. Your work is incredibly esy to read as every line is perfectly metered. Beautiful! David2  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Superbly written, as always, Kess! Denise |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Skyfyre, That was a beautiful piece. You have a wonderful talent. "To seek the sound of new horizon’s call: That distant place where dawns a brighter day." Just beautiful. "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying." Harry Anderson, "Night Court" *Cassandra Roseen* |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Skyfyre, a stunning piece, beautiful images. I hope that you have a safe journey to your new horizon. The tread of dreaming child to woman grown, The soul abandons all it’s ever known Now lies abandoned on this foreign road, Beloved scenes with careful reverence stowed In vivid hues, to paint the memory, Are all that years of journey’s past reveal. All else behind, and only hopes to lead, A wary faith to pave the new-made path, And dreams half-formed to set my bearings by, "Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? " Douglas Adams |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I mark the goal as “closer to the sky...” While in the distance fades the aftermath: The roots uptorn, unleashing chance’s seed. ... brilliant words, skyfyre, simply brilliant... If I may add something that comes to my confused head... Led myself into a distant path, marking horizon Following unmarked foorsteps, I warily tread The distant moorings came even so near, a run, Taking me ever so close, no longer afraid, Reached foothills of a mountain tall, looked upwards saw the sun, At the top, feeling closest to the sky, flagged - a red one, Feeling a sense of utter happiness, my goal, has been reached, to be closer to heaven ...... Regards, Sudhir. Life is like a painting, That in an art gallery is left hanging, Though many come just to look at it, A very few actually come to enjoy it. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kess, I always look forward to your poetry and the beauty and feeling of this piece is no exception. Lovely work! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Kess, to say that your ability surprises me would be an untruth...yet, I remain, each time, amazed at your gift. Wonderful, this treasure... ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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