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Wild Sweet Ride

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Martie
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   Wild Sweet Ride


Winding was that road dear
when we let our hair fly
and I capped the soaring fabric
and you grew shaggy
and we stopped and fished
and then ate grilled trout
and it rained almonds
and sealed onions in foil
perfumed the rooms from open windows
priceless gems on those days when
we honeyed with the moon
and sat naked on the porch
and listened to the river
where forever played
and entwined our hearts with songs
so sweet that to this day I can taste
you in the tune and bring back
when I bent over the rail
and hung my hair wet and unclothed
into the sweet pine of the air
and you said that there was gold there
and I just smiled
when you took my picture
and brought me wild flowers for the table

and so we began this wild sweet ride.



[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 05-15-2000).]
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Denise
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1 posted 05-15-2000 09:45 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Oh, Martie, this is absolutely beautiful!  

Denise
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2 posted 05-15-2000 09:47 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Wonderful, Martie! No memories are as great as love beginning. I can see you sitting on that porch.....and, man, do you look good!!!!  
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You have an extraordinary way of making your readers feel as if they were there in the places and times you describe.  I am in awe of that talent...this poem was wonderful!  

Christina =^..^=
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I could smell the flowers, taste the fish, hear the river....You brought me there, it was a beautiful trip, Thank you  
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5 posted 05-15-2000 10:16 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie !!
This is simply nostalgia at it's tenderest.
You're amazing !

I can see the Glendora Gazette now
Martie ... Nekkid In The Pines !
(well, I think Balladeer made me do it)
Love ya'
~*Marge*~





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Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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Oh, Martie, oh, Martie, oh, Martie!
Wonderful love story!

Thank you for bringing me another taste of the times from yore.  Dale and I might have been splashing nearby, near an old abandoned mountain bridge, thirty years younger, nude in the sun, long hair flowing, building a dam innocently in the swelling creek like children?  Ever those years will call to me.  And rarely do I see anyone write of them.

Lovely imagery!  Absolutely lovely.  And I especially enjoyed the vision: "I bent over the rail and hung my hair wet and unclothed into the sweet pine of the air and you said that there was gold there" and while I read this, I felt the magic in the air.

Wild sweet ride, indeed!  And may we never forget!

Beautiful, my dear friend!  Exquisite!
~ ~ ~



 The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G.



[This message has been edited by Rosemary J. Gwaltney (edited 05-15-2000).]
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super.
Martie
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Denise--I'm pleased you thought this beautiful

Balladeer--beginning are special times..as are middles and ends...and hey, you sure have a window of imagination...

Bobbycat--what a lovely thing to say, thankyou

Butterflies-don't-cry--So glad you liked the trip

Marge--seems to me I recall you nekkid in your front yard, was it gardening..well maybe not nekkid but...that deer was there for that one too.... Love you sweetheart!

Rosemary--Oh, I'm so glad you liked this...you know you and Dale and the poems of your love just may have inspired me...give him a hug for me.

rene--thanks for the super.
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we honeyed with the moon
and sat naked on the porch
and listened to the river
where forever played
and entwined our hearts with songs
so sweet that to this day I can taste
you in the tune and bring back
when I bent over the rail
and hung my hair wet and unclothed
into the sweet pine of the air
and you said that there was gold there
and I just smiled
when you took my picture
and brought me wild flowers for the table

and so we began this wild sweet ride.

-----------------------
Martie,
i ADORE this poem...
its absolutely delightful!!
filled with the wonderment and anticpation of love all in its "new innocence".
WONDERFUL WRITING
take care, jm
Elizabeth Santos
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10 posted 05-16-2000 05:52 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Martie,
Christina hit the nail on the head, you do indeed make the reader feel a part of the action. And this is such a rare talent.
Why, Rosemary even thought she was there in a nearby stream! Getting a little carried away, wouldn't you say?
Liz
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Beautiful and picturesque Martie! Your imagery was wonderful ... I enjoyed this!

Best wishes,
/Kit
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12 posted 05-16-2000 06:43 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Oh Martie, I know when I'm about to read your poetry, that I am going to love it.
This is really really beautiful, I felt as if I was there. Excellent as always!  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
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well I have to douse fish in lemon and hold my breath to eat it....but the rest of the images were perfect.....great writing  
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Another lovely, sensuous one, Martie!

Corinne
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Janet Marie--I'm so glad you liked it...your comments are always so sweet.

Liz--Thanks hon...you know I think Rosemary and Dale were down stream building a dam cause I heard some wonderful laughter.

Hi Kit, thank you so much for reading and liking the imagery.

Dark angel--I haven't seen you for awhile..How are you?  Thanks for the read and wonderful comment.

Corazon--fresh is best..no lemon necessary.

Corinne--It was a sensuous time
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Ther must be something I've misplaced here. I seem to have had some kind of memory lapse, what poem am I responding to anyway..? I do recall a some picture... Honey, is this your poem or Martie's... or was it just the "60's" I haven't gotten lost like this since I can't remember... Got any clues..?

It's a jewel Martie...



 If I could paint a portrait, of this life in which I've led, and somehow sketch a story, of the visions in my head, I'd start out with a canvas, stretched tightly in a frame, and in the bottom corner, I'd leave room to sign my name. (Michelle A. Bartley)
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