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Lost in a time

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insect
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0 posted 05-15-2000 09:22 PM       View Profile for insect   Email insect   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for insect

Lost in a time

Here I am, back again
Lost in a time of love and pain
This time repeats, repeats when
When I'm here, here again

Deep in love, love again
Making love as much as I can
This love I'm giving, giving when
When I'm in love, love again

Now you're leaving, leaving again
Left alone in the poring rain
This pain is hurting, hurting when
When I'm in pain, pain again

Here I am, back again
Lost in a time of love and pain
This time repeats, repeats when
When I'm here, here again

Deep in love, love again...


© Copyright 2000 insect - All Rights Reserved
Dawn Eclipse
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1 posted 05-15-2000 09:39 PM       View Profile for Dawn Eclipse   Email Dawn Eclipse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dawn Eclipse

That was a most lovely piece.  It seems that we all encounter that during our lives... but it makes us all the more stronger.  

 "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying."
Harry Anderson, "Night Court"

*Cassandra Roseen*
insect
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2 posted 05-16-2000 12:06 AM       View Profile for insect   Email insect   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for insect

Dawn Eclipse…Beautiful name you picked for yourself.
                           And thanks for the most lovely reply to
                           my poem. Very true what you said.  
tulip
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3 posted 05-16-2000 02:16 AM       View Profile for tulip   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for tulip

Insect,
I'm right where you are!  It seems life repeats itself for some of us, but maybe we're lucky because we can allow ourselves to fall in love!  
netswan
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4 posted 05-16-2000 03:32 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Insect this poem made me cry  -- great
writing.   But, wants me to teach so
you do not have to experience this again
and again.
Email me if you would like advice

warmly
netswan
Kit McCallum
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5 posted 05-16-2000 06:28 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Well written Insect ... I enjoyed the way you intertwined the repetitiveness with the theme of your topic ... very well done!

Best wishes,
/Kit
Parker
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... the old black rum


6 posted 05-16-2000 12:53 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

I've been stuck in this loop many times
I've been stuck in this loop many times
I've been stuck in this loop many times
I've been stuck in this loop many times

Parker
Parker
Parker
Parker
Sudhir Iyer
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium


7 posted 05-16-2000 01:17 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Nice work, I see here.
One suggestion to keep the style consistent, choose this for a first line
"I am back, back again"..

Ah! I cannot stop commenting can I??  Meddling creature, I am and I seem to be...

Regards, sudhir.

 Life is like a painting,
That in an art gallery is left hanging,
Though many come just to look at it,
A very few actually come to enjoy it.
insect
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8 posted 05-17-2000 08:14 PM       View Profile for insect   Email insect   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for insect

tulip…"we can allow ourselves to fall in love!"…. that sounds so beautiful…
             THANK YOU very much!

netswan…I am touched that it touched you!
                 You care so much. You are a swan with a halo!
                  Sometimes my heart can show in my poetry…but
                   you have the biggest heart of all…I thank you very warmly
                  

Kit McCallum…You are quite a package thank you are quite a package…

Haleyja…Just press Esc…

Sudhir Iyer…   I am back, back again
                      Lost in a time of love and pain
                      This time repeats, repeats when
                      When I'm here, here again

                      Thank you for the tip…it was a long poem and
                       it would have taken me FOREVER to change all
                       those verses. Thank you for the tip…it was a long
                       poem and it would have taken me FOREVER to
                       change all those verses. Thank you for the tip…
                       it was a long poem and it would have taken me
                       FOREVER…Esc…Esc..Esc.Esc  
 
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