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Open Poetry #7

Being and reality

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

0 posted 2000-05-15 07:50 PM

Being and reality

Like a black hole
I extol no light
Futility
my tabloid
dissolving bright
into a
world pool
of void.
My ears are
deaf
my eyes are
blind
striving beyond
serendipity
a measure of
human kind.

And from a black hole
created it, my soul.

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2000-05-15 08:22 PM

Sy
My poor little brain cells can't always reach the depths of your thoughts. This has a sad tone to it. I enjoy seeing you experimenting with various rhyme schemes. I don't know that I could handle this one, though. You seem to do it with ease
Liz

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

2 posted 2000-05-15 11:01 PM

I was here and read it. I hate to say it passed me over too, but it did. It does sound sad, but you have a fantastic flow to it all. I've read it a few times now, and am not really grasping the full meaning, sorry.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-05-16 12:39 PM

did some one wake up in the wrong side of the bed today???

(just kiding) hoping to make you *smile*
dark and brooding poem Sy-guy...
but deep and thought provoking as well...
loved the last lines.
take care, jm

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2000-05-16 04:32 PM

Janet,
Before this poem goes to sleep I just wanted to say thank you for the comment. *L*

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

5 posted 2000-05-16 04:58 PM

Your imagery here...makes me think of space (the outer kind) and also that commatose place in sleep, where nothing can harm us.

Great imagery.

Corinne

Meadowmuse
Member Elite

since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

6 posted 2000-05-16 06:31 PM

Enjoyed this soulful extolling, Seymour. There is sometimes seems a universe between being and reality... Chin up, dearie.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

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