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Wobbly Head Bob
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I concentrated on her
The blue belt that she wore
My thoughts were all about her
Of what she was before
With a look she sought;
She grabbed then caught
Me, running for the door

I sat myself inside her
White wisps that floated by
I placed my hands beside her
And felt she was to cry
With a sigh so pained;
She shook then rained
Her teardrops from the sky

I remove myself now from her
My soul is falling through
The winds that whip about her
Are pulling me toward you
With eyes deceiving;
She wept thus leaving
Me, to find what I must do


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1 posted 05-15-2000 05:19 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Good poem sir! Welcome to the family!!  
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Well, you found us! Welcome, Bob!

This poem is lovely... some really fine lines in here... I especially liked

"I sat myself inside her" and
"She shook then rained/ Her teardrops from the sky"...

well spoken, imaginative... creative!

Glad you stopped by! Hang around for a while, k?

-doreen  
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3 posted 05-16-2000 10:06 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Great poem ....love the open ending, makes one think   use their imagination

All my love,
Jeffrey

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but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

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You've a delicate rhythm with this lovely poem. Welcome.

~ Claire

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Wonderful verse. I liked the way in which it was worded, so ingenuitive yet simple. Keep up the great work.

^_^ LadySofia


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