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Rex Allen McCoy
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0 posted 2000-05-15 02:25 PM



Your Big Chance
~~~


You  ride  the  wind  through  space  and  time
to  search  within  subconscious  mind
You  catch  a  wave  from  distant  source
within  your  cave  receive  its'  force
You  fire  a  rocket  of  pondering  thought
from  the  depths  of  your  knowledge
before  it's  forgot
~
Your  rocket  explodes  to  magnificent  sparks
with  a  beacon  of  light  alive  in  the  dark
Its'  arrow  streaks  true and  slices  within
to  your  naked  soul  bourn  high  on  the  wind
Your  big  chance ...
now  or  never
~
A  deathly  quiet  envelopes  the  earth
surrounds  your  essence ...
til  a  pin  can  be  heard
You  become  the  beacon ...
your  chance  is  now
So  tell  the  world
what  you've  found
~
if  you  can  put  it  in  words
~
and  make  it  quick
they  haven't  got  all  day
~~~


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Denise
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1 posted 2000-05-15 02:40 PM


Oh, Rex, this is absolutely wonderful! You describe it well, and the last two lines are the cherry on top!  

Denise

Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
2 posted 2000-05-15 11:59 PM


Thankyou Denise ... I definitely spent a lot more time on this version than on the first
Thanks again

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2000-05-16 08:41 AM


Rex, this is great writing.
much wisdom in these words and yes,
the ending lines sum it up with a ironic truth.
tkae care, jm

WhtDove
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4 posted 2000-05-16 10:59 PM


WOOHOOO!  I love it, I love it, I love it!

Did I say I loved it?  This was fabulouso!

 <*\\\><

Our background and circumstances may have influenced who we are, but we are responsible for who we become.


Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
5 posted 2000-05-17 12:00 PM


Janet Marie ... quite often we can't seem to spit out the right words and our thoughts go misunderstood ... especially talking to duct cleaners on the phone

WhtDove ... WOOHOOO!   thankyou ...
you know how to bring a smile

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