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Wobbly Head Bob
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since 2000-05-15
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Virginia, USA

0 posted 2000-05-15 02:23 PM


Deep inside is where I hide
I'm hiding from the information
Wanna get out know what its about
but I've lost the inspiration
Here again with you my friend
We're gonna get a confirmation
Of the deed follow my lead
I'm looking for the constellation

Looking for we gotta find more
And work on the calibration
Walking through and I'll follow you
Theres gonna be a celebration

On the phone we're not alone
Better watch the punctuation
On the ear you know they'll hear
Have to keep up with conversation

Oh too soon out on the moon
We're missing the gravitation
Hear him speak my heart got weak
We've made the final destination


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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
1 posted 2000-05-15 08:26 PM


I see some real talent here, Wobbly... hehe... good name... You've made your point and used a very difficult device quite adeptly... Internal rhyme is pretty difficult to pull off with the consistency I see in your work...

Keep 'em coming Wob....  

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