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{Lone Wolf and jeffreys challenge}

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fool
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0 posted 05-15-2000 07:51 AM       View Profile for fool   Email fool   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for fool

I've split the sky
with violent action
seen reactions
ever clear.

You and I are never quiet
always moving through the nightlight
always watching with delight
though theres sadness
its not ours.

We mirror dreams
and seamless patterns,
make the nightmares
not so dark.

Although the morning
brings us change
we keep cold lightening
and rearrange.

You've kissed me once
and dawn came calling,
I never stopped falling
into you.


New horizon
colors ambient
loves so frequent
when I hold you.
We dance naked
in the sunrise
all the world
is our surprise.

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1 posted 05-15-2000 07:57 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

This is splendid, Fool -
challenge well met ---)

I Like it -- especially the last line.

netswan
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2 posted 05-15-2000 06:11 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Challenge Extremely well met m'friend

New horizon
colors ambient
loves so frequent
when I hold you.
We dance naked
in the sunrise
all the world
is our surprise.

That last line is amazing

All my love,
Jeffrey



 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

Lone Wolf
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3 posted 05-15-2000 08:45 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

You have a great job in meeting our challenge!!!  I have to agree with , Jeffrey...the last line is incredible!!  
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