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Oh Heart, Oh Heart
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Oh Heart, Oh Heart |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Oh Heart, Oh Heart Oh heart, Oh heart Would it but pump in heated rapture the searing blood of this stranded lover's life though surrounded by these cold and feminine waters whose frigid look can build a fortress of unfulfilled desires oh heart, oh heart does it not bleed of want, and want of love when desire is filled to leek and drip of need and where is this phantom of touch when touch is a place that lacks of now and then to appear at random moments to a cold and faceless scene Oh heart, Oh heart constant with rhythm that begs the question of why and why is in deed the answer and the truth in deed the lie and love was the lie of the journey that spoke in the past of when and does the heart not answer of the now that is so hollow when the love of the heart is bled Oh heart, Oh heart...... James Parker Haley May 14, 2000 [This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 05-15-2000).] |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Oh my heart! Splendid read, Parker netswan |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"and where is this phantom of touch when touch is a place that lacks of now and then to appear at random moments to a cold and faceless scene" damn!!! wow!! whew! this poem took my breath away... very well done, parker! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Oh heart, Oh heart constant with rhythm that begs the question of why and why is in deed the answer and the truth in deed the lie and love was the lie of the journey that spoke in the past of when and does the heart not answer of the now that is so hollow when the love of the heart is bled ---------------- ***** oh poet, oh poet ... in this verse you bleed divine. your words enchant and captivate, grace and eloquence in each splendid line. ***** parker-man, this is exquisite writing. much different than most of your work... but a very impressive style. dark and gothic dressed in desire. very nice poet-man, very nice. jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving How one move just puts me by myself There you go just trusting someone else Now I know I put us both through hell ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me And I'm not sayin We ever had the right to hold on I just didn't wanna let you get away from me. ~MB20~Leave |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Park, This dark journey is indeed a departure for you. "Feminine waters" - very interesting combination of words. Feminine waters immediately brought to mind the womb, which should feel warm and safe. Which is what I wish for you, my friend. Corinne |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Well kind poets, thank you for your nice replies. This poem, started when I first joined the site and I wrote the first two verses, and let it sit.. So I wanted the poem to stay with the original feeling of those two verses. Maybe there is some truth to it, for parts of my life. But this journey is far from dark and one of my bright spots is Passions in Poetry and all its wonderful poets, of whome I admire and hate for all their talent.  So don't worry I'm not on a dark journey. or maybe I am.  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh James, Oh James, this one captured me I could not take my eyes of it! Beautiful! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Parker~ I felt drawn into the waters ... felt the shocking of the cold waters that takes your breath away. Of course I immediately wanted to come up for air and run for the nearest set of arms to be warmed in a terrycloth hug. Refreshing ! I like it. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Just beautiful, As always to be expected from you, Love your style!!! makes me smile, such deep words bleeding from a poets heart!!! **sigh*** |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Enchanting...well done! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Dark Angel, that is a wonderful compliment, thank you.... stare away. Marge, So you ran for the nearest terrycloth teddy bear for a hug, I get one of those... thanks for your kind remarks.. A Romantic Heart, if your smiling my work is done. thank you. Sunshine, thank you for responding. Parker |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
James, this has something about it which is quit different for you. I am not sure if it has anything to do with the fact it is a little darker then most, but there is something about it. It is an interesting piece for sure, i think you have strectched your poetic abilities even further with this one. Very nice. Marina |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Hmmmmmmm....You called?...*g*..I know, time for my humour to be tucked up in bed.. ..but sometimes the profound has that affect on me.. HUGS |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Oh Parker, Oh, Parker So constant with exquisite verse And passion And every other thing That makes for a wonderfully Unforgettable poem Liz |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well done, Parker! Denise |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Parker, this is just ...really well done...Bravo!! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Marina, thank you I'm trying bit by bit. RainbowGirl, who am I to argue, I love a hug, thanks. Liz, thank you, your so sweet. Denise, thank you as always, still gotta get to work on my sonnet, and maybe some input from you. Martie, thank you I bow for thee. Parker |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
I think this one needs to be pumped back up! |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is very well-written and rhythmic, Parker, with almost a song-like quality to it. Exceptional work. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
insect, thank you, it was bugging me that it went down so quick.. Balladeer, thank you. Though I have not tried to sing it, I can't see it sounding to good with my cat screech winey singing voice. Parker [This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 05-17-2000).] |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
this is wonderful....how the heart can speak...and how other hearts can hear the language....you spoke your heart so well |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corazon, I guess its heart to heart my friend. Sometimes the heart just knows what to say. Thank you for your kind response. Parker |
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