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The Eyes Look

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Lone Wolf
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0 posted 05-14-2000 05:06 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lone Wolf

The eyes look
do they really see
what's hidden deep inside me

The eyes look
they pierce my flesh
the blood flows fresh

The eyes look
there's no feeling there
just a flat blank stare

The eyes look
from behind the mask
removing it, enormous task

The eyes look
examine my bare soul
try to discern my role

The eyes look
beneath the surface deep
hidden secrets they keep

The eyes look
hatred fills the room
my heart feels impending doom


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
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netswan
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1 posted 05-14-2000 07:50 PM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Lone Wolf - so well written - so sad -
and empty ---

Hugs
netswan
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2 posted 05-14-2000 07:51 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~LW,....it is an enormous task,....removing the mask.  You write so well,...your words so real,..so heartfelt. Thanks for sharing.
lorilockheart
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3 posted 05-14-2000 08:22 PM       View Profile for lorilockheart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lorilockheart

This really struck me at the end.  I don't think I expected such a powerful ending.  This one made me think.

Lori

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I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance.
song by LeeAnn Womack
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4 posted 05-14-2000 09:42 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

These eyes look
inside your heart
and see the beauty there

Lone Wolf,

Very well written m'friend....Sending
(((((BIG HUGS))))) to you

All my love,
Jeffrey

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

Lone Wolf
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5 posted 05-14-2000 10:34 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

netswan....thank you, kind of feeling that way today...

SF...yes, it is and thank you for the compliment.  

Lori....wow, always happy to provoke thoughts. Thank you!!

Jeffrey...awwe, I see the same in you, m'friend!!  Thank you for the kind word sand hugs!  {{{HUGS}}} back!!  
LW



 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
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6 posted 05-15-2000 07:00 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

LoneWolf~
Such longing in these eyes ...
nicely portrayed ... sad the view.
~*Marge*~



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Danny Holloway
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7 posted 05-15-2000 10:11 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

The eyes look, the heart feels, and the soul suffers....
~~very emotional writing LW ~~


 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

Lone Wolf
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8 posted 05-15-2000 09:29 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Marge -
Yes, much longing there and the view is sad now, but tomorrow is a brighter day.  Thank you as always for reading.  

DH -
That is it exactly.  Feeling very emotional these days.
LW


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
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