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Backyard Haiku

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Corinne
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Magpie forages,
regal in black and white stripes,
treasuring garbage.

Fat squirrel slaps tail,
chirping territorial,
balances on wire.

Old oak tree stands broad,
strong and stately yet fragile,
home to woodpeckers.

Rotting swing hanging,
echoes of children’s laughter,
long ago singing.

© 2000 Corinne Bailey

© Copyright 2000 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
Parker
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1 posted 05-14-2000 01:02 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Wonderfull Haiku, I really liked the meaning in the last one. Reminds me of an artist that paints with ghost shadows, memories of the past.

Parker
brian madden
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beautiful and haunting, that was an amazing hiaku
Corinne
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Thank you, Parker and Brian.

Corinne
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4 posted 05-14-2000 04:48 PM       View Profile for bobbycat   Email bobbycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bobbycat

I agree with Parker--that last Haiku was really visual, really got me.  I love this one.  

Christina =^..^=
Corinne
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5 posted 05-14-2000 11:29 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Thank you, Christina.

Corinne
Marge Tindal
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6 posted 05-15-2000 06:39 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Corinne~
This is just wonderful !
You've captured the very essence of Haiku.
I happen to be very fond of this piece.
Wonderful images spring to life.
~*Marge*~



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netswan
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7 posted 05-15-2000 08:17 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Oh Corrine, I didn't know a a haiku
could be done in stanzes. I love this.

This puts a new light on Haikus for me.

Full of imagery.

netswan
Corinne
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8 posted 05-15-2000 10:58 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Thank you, Marge,

I've always loved Hiaku, but find it is most challenging to write, to say a lot with so little and to have some element of nature and surprise.

Thanks, Netswan,

well, technically, they are four separate Haiku!

Corinne
Dennis L. White
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9 posted 05-15-2000 11:11 AM       View Profile for Dennis L. White   Email Dennis L. White   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dennis L. White

Corinne,
   These are great, you've captured special moments in verse and have shared your vision so well!  The fourth Haiku really shouts images at me! WELL DONE!
               Dennis :^)



  Moonbeams radiate
As the veiling cloud has past
Playful shadows dance!

D.L.White :^)

RAM
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lovely, engaging Haiku, Corinne.

the magpie calls.   Let's fix that swing.  

Rick
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You do these very well, Corinne!  

Denise
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cool images you have here...how i wish i can get to see these delightful things in my backyard too
Corinne
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Thank you, Dennis, glad you enjoyed!

RAM, yes, let's.

Denise and Kaile, thank you!

Corinne
 
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