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a girl's sad life
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a girl's sad life |
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Bunny Junior Member
since 2000-05-13
Posts 30 |
There is a girl over there Crouched and hiding from the world This girl is shaking Why I do not know This girl is hurting Trying to carry her tears She is running away But she is not fast enough This girl is in pain A hurt from deep down inside her soul This pain she has is causing confused thoughts Now this girl is bleeding She has made a fatal mistake She tried to make it better Tried to be set free This girl is dying now, This girl is me..... |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Oh, don't ever believe that any mistake is fatal! Don't give up. Don't give up. A heartrending poem. Thank you for sharing. ~ ~ ~ The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...we all want freedom...freedom to find someone we love and to be loved, and freedom to make our own choices. James |
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tincan5 Junior Member
since 2000-04-25
Posts 33 |
A very moving poem. Always remember, within you is something very special. Your life does have meaning and purpose and you can overcome anything  Sending you my very best wishes! |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Welcome to Passions, Bunny! Sad poem -----but it is good to write about feelings -----And, good to admit that the girl is you. Life has its ups and downs - we learn through the down times so we can rejoice in the happy times ------don't give up hope. netswan |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Hang in there new friend....It helps to write it out of you..even if it is just a little bit. You're good,...so keep 'em coming. |
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Slashed soul Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 86England |
In the silence of your dreams, there is a thought, a love it seems, Never feel down, your not alone, my love lives very far from home. When you feel sad, remeber this, the feeling you had, when you had your first kiss. -Rich- |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
That was a very moving poem. Never give up. I've been there, but I've survived, so you can too! hope to see more of your poetry soon! Welcome."Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying." Harry Anderson, "Night Court" *Cassandra Roseen* |
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