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Are You My Mom Tonight?

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SpitFire
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0 posted 05-13-2000 02:40 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for SpitFire



Are you my mom tonight?

If I need you,...will you come?
down the hall,...to where I'm from.
This safe haven room of mine
where I write, sleep, AND dine.

Are you my mom tonight?

Have you the strength to care for me?
Have you the eyes for my pain to see?
These walls protecting my all,
Confining my helpless call.

Are you my mom tonight?

Have you the hands to gently touch,
this girl who's scared and loves you much?
Have you the ears to hear me cry?
Have you the sense to know the reason why?

Are you my mom tonight?


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hsystems
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1 posted 05-13-2000 02:44 PM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

SpitFire - Wow!  This is haunting and beautiful!


Troy

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SpitFire
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2 posted 05-13-2000 02:48 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Thanks for your reply.  Not your typical Mother's Day poem, but it was my situation. Thanks again.
netswan
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3 posted 05-13-2000 04:44 PM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Ah SpitFire - if I read another tear jerker
I shall have to drink a ton of water
and eat a tablespoon of salt.

Such a sad and touching poem

netswan
Janet Marie
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4 posted 05-13-2000 04:52 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Spitfire,
im sorry you know this pain, thank you for the reply to my poem.
dont feel like you to apologize for your poem.
you cant write a "typical" poem if your situation isnt typical.
Just like standing in the card shops at holidays and birthdays...
I use to pick up and throw back so many cards trying to find one that was appropriate.
the mushy sentimental ones dont alway apply.
but sometimes time and communication can create change.
your lovely poem speaks to that..
good luck, take care, jm


 It's amazing
How you make your face just like a wall
How you take your heart and turn it off
How I turn my head and you lose it all ...
And it's unnerving
How one move just puts me by myself
There you go just trusting someone else
Now I know I put us both through hell ...
I'm not sayin
That there was nothing wrong
I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me
And I'm not sayin
We ever had the right to hold on
I just didn't wanna let you get away from me.
~MB20~Leave


Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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5 posted 05-13-2000 05:37 PM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

This poem is so terribly sad.  So terribly haunting and poignant and sad.  So well written.  Thank you for sharing it.
SpitFire
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6 posted 05-13-2000 07:22 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Netswan...never heard of that ??? remedy?...lol..thanks for the reply.

~Janet Marie...thank you for your kind words and understanding,,,it's sweet of you.

~Rosemary...thanks for reading,...thanks for replying with your kindness...just thank you all...really.
Sven
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7 posted 05-13-2000 07:22 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Spitfire, this one brought a tear to the eye. . . the confusion and lonliness of a child. . .something no child should ever know. . .

Excellent. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

SpitFire
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8 posted 05-13-2000 09:41 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Sven,...thank you for reading and replying...no tears please  
jwesley
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9 posted 05-13-2000 10:10 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Spitfire, you've just written one of my favorite poems. Very touching, very warm, and vividly shows one never loses that link to mom, no matter where we are, or how long we've been gone. Mom's are unique, we always seek their warmth (physical and spiritual), and they are always the first and the last name we call. I am a father, and am extremely close to my children, and although I know my bond with them is as perfect as I can attain, I know I will never have the same bond with them, their mother has, and I envy women that!

Mother's are wonderful creatures, and I adore them all, and I think your poem very much a mothers day poem because it plainly expresses the love and the need we all have for our mothers.

Thank you for it...


j.

SpitFire
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10 posted 05-13-2000 10:20 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~J....thank you for your kind response to my poem. My mother's warmth (both spiritual and physical) is indeed what I was yearning for.  
Joel the wolf
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11 posted 05-14-2000 01:06 AM       View Profile for Joel the wolf   Email Joel the wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Joel the wolf's Home Page   View IP for Joel the wolf

I was pretty much put to the side, growing up. I was the only boy and mom didn't have much to do with me, I grew up wild, as they say.
I had ask this many nights with a whisper from my room, for my mom to come down to the basement where they put me.
It was a cement hell.
You are not alone kid, even in the final moment of death the strongest men cry out for mom.
Joel.


 I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.
tracie66
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12 posted 05-14-2000 01:38 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Dear little spitfire~
Read this with a tear in my eye, hon your words had so much longing in them. Maybe in time your mum will realise what she's done and missed out on and make amends I truly hope so.
Email me if you ever want to talk you know you can  
Luv Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


SpitFire
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13 posted 05-14-2000 11:09 AM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Joel,...gosh,..I don't really know what to say to that.   I guess I'm not alone, in the longing for it.  Thanks for replying,..thanks for always taking part in everything I write.  Love ya, Spit. Haha.

~Tracie,....my kindness, thank you for replying with such care.  You are too sweet to me   Thanks for reading.
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