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I thought that I could write.

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HelmutB
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0 posted 05-13-2000 04:54 AM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

I thought that I could write.

I thought that I could write
A piece of poetry
The best I ever tried

Words where are they when Iím in need
Some donít come to me
And others yet incise so deep

I tried to write about your beauty
But lost in your eyes
Words cannot full fill this duty

I tried to write about your tenderness
But lost in your hands
My lines arenít blessed

I tried to write about your charm
But lingering there
I was lost inside your arm

I tried to write about your love I feel
But drowned in your soul
No words seemed real

I tried to write about my love
But with bleeding heart
How can I begin my dove?

I tried to write about the way you sing
But lost in your song
I could not begin

I tried, but failed so miserably
To write a piece of poetry
Describing you and me

The best I ever tried,
was to hold your hand
the day you died

Note: dieing does not always mean the physical death, it can also mean to lose something very special. In this case I refer to the "very special".


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

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brian madden
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1 posted 05-13-2000 05:02 AM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

I used to think that true beauty could not be expressed, that words only taint and devalue its wonder, but looking at this site and reading the poems changed my mind. I guess I lack the verbal capacity to express the pure wonders, but still once I am able to appreciate them and still find them in life I am not too bothered. A great poem, I am sorry for your loss (the day you died)  
Sunshine
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2 posted 05-13-2000 06:58 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Volumes, sir, your words speak volumes...
JamesMichael
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3 posted 05-13-2000 07:09 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

"I tried to write about my love..but with bleeding heart how can I begin my dove?"  Lovely writing..I hope everything works out for you Helmut.    James
netswan
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4 posted 05-13-2000 07:13 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Well done, HelmutB --)
Yes, I agree, hard to write about love
and beauty --when your heart is bleeding

take care
netswan

Kit McCallum
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5 posted 05-13-2000 07:15 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

I love the way you've written and followed through with your theme throughout the poem Helmut ... you've said this beautifully.

Best wishes,
/Kit
HelmutB
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6 posted 05-13-2000 05:58 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

brian madden
Actually your not wrong at all, I find it very difficult to find the right words too. In this case my feelings have type the poem. Thanks for reading this

Sunshine
Thank you so much, the word volumes means a volume to me....and then some

James
Thank you so much. I hope so too

netswan
I will try to take care. This person means a world to me. Thank you for your kind words
  
Kit
Your words are so appreciated and thank you for the good wishes. I'm gald you liked the piece.



 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Marge Tindal
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7 posted 05-14-2000 08:40 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Helmut, my dear loving friend~
I would wish for you to regain your happiness and your 'life'.
Your words have not failed you, sir.
Very special indeed.
Love to you
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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lorilockheart
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8 posted 05-14-2000 10:30 PM       View Profile for lorilockheart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lorilockheart

You haven't just tried to write - you did.  And beautifully.

This reminded me of something - I think a poet never stops writing inside.  There are always thoughts, feelings, and emotions banging around inside trying to get out.  Sometimes it comes out easier than others.  To me, it could just be some random thought that occurs to me, and I think - I need to write.  Other times, I have all these ideas and I just can't put it together.  
But you have done it here.
Thank you.
Lori

 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance.
song by LeeAnn Womack
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
HelmutB
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9 posted 05-15-2000 04:00 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Marge
Thank you so much, where would I be without thee.
You are very special your self, you know.

Lori
Thank you so much for your reply.
I have to agree with you; my thoughts are constantly on the go and itís sometimes so hard not to take a paper and write these thoughts down. And yes, sometimes nothing comes of it. But I try to hang on to those pieces of paper. Eventually I can get back to them and most of the time something good comes (well good for me) out of it, after all.  


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

sonjes
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10 posted 05-16-2000 06:30 AM       View Profile for sonjes   Email sonjes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sonjes

What a wonder is a poem.  You convey so much feeling here without any flourish.  This flows well from beginning to end...I completely felt every word and emotion.

  Don't care what people say
Just follow your own way
Don't give up and use the chance
To return to innocence.
-Enigma
Butterflies_dont_cry
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11 posted 05-16-2000 08:58 AM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

By explaining how you couldn't find the words....you found them in a most touching way.  This was a beautiful tribute to the one you speak of and the love for that person shows though every line.  Thank you for sharing a piece of your heart and soul with us by posting this.

 The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams

~Eleanor Roosevelt~
Rex Allen McCoy
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12 posted 05-16-2000 09:22 AM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

You haven't lost your touch for words or for writing ... very nicely done

Rex}>{{{{o>
hoot_owl_rn
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13 posted 05-16-2000 11:51 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Helmut...sometimes things don't die, they just change as we also change in our perspectives towards them. True friendship, my dear, never dies and you will always have a friend in me.
Love you my friend  
Ruth
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14 posted 05-16-2000 11:56 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Sometimes no matter how hard we try, we can't find just the right words. This is lovely, Helmut!

Denise
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15 posted 05-16-2000 01:34 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

So often a loss such as this cannot be described with words, Helmut, as we know...but your "desire" to express speaks quite audibly and beautifully.

L. and S. P.
Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


HelmutB
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sonjes
Thank you for your words, I'm glad that the poem made you feel. It fills my heart with happyness.

Butterflies_dont_cry
I'm still searching but have also found, I almost want to say. Thank you, May your butterfly never cry. I hoped and now you say I did, convey how I feel.
PS "Eleanor Roosevelt" she was right with her words. I have to thank you.

Rex Allen McCoy
Hello Rex. Perhaps you are right about "not losing touch with words", but I still miss this hand.

hoot_owl_rn
Ruth, yes you could be right with the fact that life changes and also that true friendship will never die. But above all this, I'm glad to have you as a friend. I know that you are there and I know where I can land if I need to. Thank you.
Hugs and Love to you.

dsnyder
I agree denise and thank you for your kind words. I liked the "Lovely" very much

Meadowmuse
Desire is like fire
It will burn within me heart
and words cannot smuther this fire
Thank you, Claire. Your kind words are speaking so clear to me.
L and S.P. (you)
"Henry David Thoreau", so true.





 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

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17 posted 05-16-2000 09:32 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Helmut, you don't write.....you flow. Your works are always filled with sincere and pure emotion which make everything you write produce quality. Great to see you again  
HelmutB
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18 posted 05-17-2000 05:46 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Balladeer
A nice comment comming from you made my heart beat faster. I always have and will be admiring your work. Thank you

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

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