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ashen
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0 posted 05-12-2000 11:02 PM       View Profile for ashen   Email ashen   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ashen

Numbness Within
i'm drowning in a lake of uncryable tears
i wish things to remove the guilt i bear
if all my heart wanted was to be loved
why can't it give that emotion in return?

like the walls of jerusalem, i am numb within
the guilt of love, is my cross for sin
the hole in the hand, the strangers apart
i wish i wasn't scared, i wish i had a heart.
© Copyright 2000 ashen - All Rights Reserved
soulfulpoet
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1 posted 05-12-2000 11:06 PM       View Profile for soulfulpoet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for soulfulpoet

that was a beautiful poem.
brian madden
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2 posted 05-13-2000 05:13 AM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

It is alright to be scared and you just proved you have a heart, otherwise how could you express something so tender and beautiful.

"like the walls of jerusalem, i am numb within
the guilt of love, is my cross for sin"
excellent image, thanks for sharing. I don't believe that you are numb within, in your words I can feel emotions bubbling and swirling I look forward to reading more of your poetry.
netswan
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3 posted 05-13-2000 06:49 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Ah Ashen - you have a heart ----)
wonderful little poem - and a great
way to work out indecisions

netswan
Kit McCallum
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4 posted 05-13-2000 06:53 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

You do have a lovely heart Ashen, and it's crying out it's words beautifully on paper. Nice work ...

Best wishes,
/Kit
 
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