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~* Love Sails Free *~
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~* Love Sails Free *~ |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas 
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~* Love Sails Free *~  He prepared his boat to sail with eager confidence & skill - Pushed off toward the raging sea his passions to fulfill... She stayed behind on shore watching as he left for sea - Happy tears ran down her face she loved to see him free... A glowing smile on his face he waved till she was gone - The shore no longer in his sight but he could hear her song... She sang adventure sweet wishing him a journey great - And with her love to guide him fast he sailed on out toward Fate... Left standing there on shore with his boat no more in sight - She headed back, to ready now for she too, sailed tonight... Her destination different though with confidence & skill - She pushed off toward the raging sea her passions to fulfill... A glowing smile on her face she waved till she was gone - The shore no longer in her sight and thus, she sang her song... Their boats both on the sea of Fate his thither, hers was yon - Their ships may never pass this night nor even in the dawn... But every once in sailor's while he swears he sees her bow - His course though different from her own Will Fate cross them somehow...? -poetFemmeFatale May 12, 2000 |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Hey pretty lady!!! =) Beuatiful poem and story here. All though it may be a fantasy, I hope the paths cross. =) It would make for a good ending (or maybe begining?) to the story. Still "love what you do for me". =) Keep up the new style and I'm forever yours.  --Dave< !signature--> "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott [This message has been edited by WhiteNite (edited 05-12-2000).] |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
So does that mean you're hooked on my poetry? It's kind of a shorter story poem. I'm learning to "keep 'em short"....LOL (not really, just got lucky on this one!) This one is actually not fantasy - it's very real, and I'm very glad to be setting sail, as is he. Fate deals some funny cards sometimes...makes you wonder what lies beyond the setting sun. Have you ever been on a sailboat during a breathtaking sunset? I was in Cancun...if there was ever a moment in time I wished to freeze, it was then. The beauty in God's creation takes my breath away sometimes... I always give you a hard time because of your "rambling"...and here I am, doing it too! Sorry!  Thanks for all your sweet replies. You're such a faithful "regular". LOL |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
beautiful Gen... get out those colored pencils LOL this is lovely... fate and the sea...makes for some perfect inspiration. and sailors aint half bad either  lolloooove a man in a uniform *smile* HEY DAVEY BOY-WHATS UP  later gen-gator jm |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Janet! Wazzzup?? Davie is going out tonight. Said something about that he's stripping tonight in some club...? LOL We had tea, and he filled me in on his agenda for the evening! Very funny! I told him to BE CAREFUL.....I know how the ladies get. I used to sit front and center at those things! ROFLMAO Glad you liked my poem, btw. I love romance and the sea...I DON'T necessarily like sailors, except this one. LOL I've known men in uniform, and as long as you don't have to put up with their attitudes, they're sexy as can be. LOL You take care until I get a chance to yap at you.  I should add, this boy's been to boot camp, and he has no attitude. Nope, no B.S. from him. [This message has been edited by poetFemmeFatale (edited 05-13-2000).] |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
pFF, Love the sea and your poem!!! Excellent writing....imaginative tale you told.....reeled me right in there!!! LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
What a nice surprise ending this has! I was fully expecting him to die at sea, her to wait for him (how I usually write stuff, I guess), and was happy to see she was on a journey as well. Nice one! Corinne |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
I too was expecting a sad ending. Guess that goes to show you that one should never assume. What a wonderful poem with a great ending! Much Enjoyed pFF! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
A sad ending? No Way!!! Not this time right Gen? I really am loving this new style of yours Gen, makes me kind of jealous, it's almost as good as my own!!! LOL  This gives new meaning to the phrase, "Two ships passing. . ." Great poem Gen, keep it up. . . it's nicer to be happy isn't it? (and on a side note, of course there's no BS from him. . . he has to deal with all of yours!!! LOL ------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Gen, this is great! I love the twist to 'ships passing in the night'....I hope all is well with you (you're poetry is certainly going well!)....and the only man in uniform you can trust is the Good Humor Man!!! He's got popsicles!  |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Gen, you have certainly found your calling with this style...it really works for you. Keep it up... All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Oh my...Wishing I was a salior tonight.....hehe....I suppose I will just have to stick to being a soldier....Oh well This was absolutely fantastic PFF!! I really mean that.A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her. |
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