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*Making Love*
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*Making Love* |
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REBECCA ALLYN Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 91Lima,Ohio |
*Making Love* Even in the dark I can feel his eyes penetrate deep within my soul though my many flaws he has vowed to take me whole His eyes are so beautifully intense this is so much more than lust this feeling is something I can not compromise loving him is a must Though his caress is so gentle he is strong enough to make me weak his blissfully soft kisses make my lips unable to speak He whispers his promises of pleasure so very pure no need to ask me this is what I want my love I feel for sure Silently I plead for this love to last forever the way I feel with him is something that I thought I'd feel never He takes my hand and together this journey we glide for us it is so important to feel these emotions side by side His love is so amazing he takes my breath away as I reach this perfect heaven there is something i must say As I cling to this man whose eyes with mine meet I can feel every inch of him how fast his heart beats I close my eyes and drift to this place so divine He slowly whispers I love you and I my dear I whisper back,I love you too |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) This is awesome!! You have captured it so perfectly, thank you for sharing your gift with us. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
One chance at one's heart and perhaps true love can be found ~ Well, it looks like you may have found yours. This was really sweet reading. CocoBaci |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Excellent expression in this poem. Can really feel the love flowing through! ~~nice writing~~ A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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REBECCA ALLYN Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 91Lima,Ohio |
You guys are so sweet!!! Thanks LOTS of LUV, Becky |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
This is one of the best love poems I've ever read and I mean it too. In fact, I wish that I could write one like that. It was so expressive and totally from the heart. You deserve the word classic next to this piece. Nathan |
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REBECCA ALLYN Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 91Lima,Ohio |
Nathan, You are such a sweetheart!! But way to kind I do appreciate your support I guess I am just a hopeless romantic!! LOTS of LUV, Becky |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Bravo Rebecca!! The world could do with some more hopless romantics  Well Done!Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BeckyAllyn~ This is so refreshing. Good to see romanticism alive and flourishing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is very beautiful, Becky! Denise |
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REBECCA ALLYN Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 91Lima,Ohio |
Thanks again guys and I agree we do need more hopeless romantics !!! LOTS of LUV, Becky |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Becky, excellent work - you go, girl! And, in regard to your comment about being a hopeless romantic - I like to think of it as being a hopeful romantic, rather than a hopeless one.  Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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lorilockheart Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 206Alabama |
Becky, This made my heart melt - and ache too. You have done an excellent job here. Every emotion, feeling, and all the intensity wrapped up into this one moment. Awesome. Lori ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance. song by LeeAnn Womack ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW!!! LOVED THIS! Excellent!!What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Enola Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 138England |
This is stunning! It has to be one of the best odes to a loved one that I have ever read. The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition. |
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REBECCA ALLYN Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 91Lima,Ohio |
Thanks once again guys for being so sweet and making me blush!!!! LOTS of LUV, Becky |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
From on hopeful romantic to another...fantastic piece! seriously this is a well written piece that captures the true essence of romance. thanks for a great read. chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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REBECCA ALLYN Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 91Lima,Ohio |
Chris, Thank you so much for your compliment it means a great deal to me!! Thanks!! LOTS of LUV, Becky |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
'Becca, Truly lovely poem....made my heart smile Thanks for sharing it with us! All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Heck Rebecca!!!!...How am I supposed to sleep on my pillow - alone, now????...ok, so, I'll dream.. Super poem, brings backs memories so true HUGS |
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REBECCA ALLYN Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 91Lima,Ohio |
Jeffrey, Thank you so much!! I am glad yor heart is smiling. Rainbowgirl, Thanks!! I hope you had pleasant dreams!!!! LOTS of LUV, Becky |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"His blissfully soft lips leave me unable to speak". These are the kisses that make life a passion worth living. James |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
yep will ditto jmlee on that....nice to see someone "making love" instead of tearing it down [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 05-16-2000).] |
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