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Denise
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0 posted 05-12-2000 02:05 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Denise

I tell myself itís no big deal
That I donít hear from you
But hurt is what I really feel
And donít know what to do.

My offering, so simply wrought,
By you is cast behind;
With sore rejection I have fought
Its ravages unkind.

Without a thought of selfish gain
Your friend I tried to be
And only hoped that Iíd obtain
Some common courtesy.

I hear your message loud and clear
-Iím just not worth your time;
So now I shed another tear
For lack of sharingís rhyme.

Your doorstep I will darken not
Again with pleasantries;
Sheer ignorance at last has shot
Down friendship fantasies.

Perhaps one day youíll need a song
To fill the void left where
The sweetest music once played strong
-Back when you didnít care.

I wish you well upon that day
When silence comes your way.

Denise

© Copyright 2000 Denise - All Rights Reserved
brian madden
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1 posted 05-12-2000 02:16 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

When a friend turns their back on you, you can be extremely painful. sometimes we misjudge people and fail to see that they are not being truthful about themselves. We are often better off without these people.
You speak hard truth, I hope that you were not hurt too badly. Great poem.    
CocoBaci
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2 posted 05-12-2000 02:27 PM       View Profile for CocoBaci   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CocoBaci

D, this was quite a lovely piece it rings so much truth to how things can be, thankyou for sharing it with me.
CocoBaci
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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3 posted 05-12-2000 02:34 PM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

There is a lot of pain in this poem.  Beautifully written.  I am so sorry.
REBECCA ALLYN
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4 posted 05-12-2000 02:38 PM       View Profile for REBECCA ALLYN   Email REBECCA ALLYN   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for REBECCA ALLYN

So sorry to hear this but it is beautifully written
Your work is wonderful!!!!

SMILE!!!
LOTS of LUV,
Becky
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5 posted 05-12-2000 03:29 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Denise, there is much power in this verse...although loss of friendship is always a sad thing, you've told of it with such magnificent grace  
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6 posted 05-12-2000 03:38 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Denise you have made me think of a friend that I just recently lost...she was an angel and she chose not to be mine...a bittersweet lesson...I am hurt because she chose not to be my friend but I love her for the time she gave to me.  If I look at it from my perspective I can understand...if the feelings are not in someones heart how can they be given or shared.    James
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7 posted 05-12-2000 03:48 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Denise, What a fabulous job you did writing this and I could feel your pain very strongly. Sometimes people are blind to see what sits right before their eyes. Here's a smile from me cause I know your a special person.  
Denise
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8 posted 05-12-2000 07:32 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you Brian, Coco, Rosemary, Becky, Ruth, James and Gloria for reading and for your kind comments. They are always appreciated!

Denise
Kellsue
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9 posted 05-12-2000 08:09 PM       View Profile for Kellsue   Email Kellsue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kellsue

Denise ~ Beautifully written as always!  It's hurtful when you put so much into a friendship only to be taken for granted.  I can relate to this very well... you described it to a "T"

~Kelly


 ~Kellsue

Reflect upon your present blessings-of which every man has many-not on your past misfortunes, of which all men have some. ~Charles Dickens

We make a living by what we get, but we make a life by what we give. ~Winston Churchill


Denise
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10 posted 05-12-2000 09:05 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you for reading and for your kind commments, Kelly! Yes, it is very painful, isn't it? Everything in life that is thrown our way can either defeat us or make us stronger. I'm getting pretty strong!!  

Denise
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11 posted 05-12-2000 09:29 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

No one who knows the wonderful person you are inside could ever ignore you....and anyone who doesn't recognize that doesn't know you at all.....
Janet Marie
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12 posted 05-12-2000 10:10 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

denise...
this is so well written and expressed
your pain is evidnet but at the same time  so is your strength to rise above it and move on...not to let this person do this again...
those last two lines are awesome!
strong writng here by you!
take care, jm
Butterflies_dont_cry
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13 posted 05-12-2000 10:18 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Denise...Oh my goodness..I think we know the same person!! Goodbye doesn't hurt as much as "nothing" does it...you captured every raw emotion exactly!!
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14 posted 05-12-2000 10:21 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Awww, sweetie~
Great big *HUGS* ...
it would be someone's loss to lose your friendship.

Count the friends you've got ...
whew !  'Bout as many as your posts !  

We know how important friends are ... but even the loss of one is incalculable.
*HUGS* hon !
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


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15 posted 05-13-2000 01:54 AM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

Sad poem, but very true. Friendships sometimes take those kind of turns. I've never purposely turned my back on any friends, but have lost touch. I wonder if that is not the same thing sometimes.  What is also tragic is when you try to be friens with a new friend, and they don't receive it well...especially when you've done nothing wrong to make them stay away.  

 Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"
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16 posted 05-13-2000 06:08 AM       View Profile for BSC   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BSC

Dear Denise, Such a beautiful poem about such a hurtful experience.  I could use this right now with a "friend" of mine.  "I hear your message loud and clear - I'm just not worth your time"....Ouch.  You have such a sweet heart, I can't imagine anyone not being thankful for your friendship.  Bonnie
Kit McCallum
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17 posted 05-13-2000 06:41 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

You've shared this in such a beautiful way. Your poem's rhythm flows beautifully, and your words touch deep into my heart of similar memories ... wonderful poem!

Best wishes,
/Kit
Denise
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Thank you, Balladeer, Janet Marie, Butterflies, Marge, Temptress, Bonnie and Kit for your warm and wonderful replies!  

Denise
 
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