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Brandyn Sand
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0 posted 05-12-2000 07:34 AM       View Profile for Brandyn Sand   Email Brandyn Sand   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Brandyn Sand's Home Page   View IP for Brandyn Sand

You captured my heart,
So I gave you my hand.

I gave you my life;
You gave me a band.

I sought out your closeness;
You held me at bay,

I offered my comfort;
You pushed me away.

I worked alongside you;
You relinquished your load.

I asked for your help;
You only said, ďNo.Ē

I pleaded for insight,
But you would not hear

I told you youíre losing
The one you hold dear.

You became blind,
Seeing only yourself.

And I wasnít content
To remain on a shelf.

You finally left me
And Iím in your debt;

Iím now freed from the pain,
While youíre chained to regret.


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Nan
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1 posted 05-12-2000 07:43 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

You've a bittersweet theme here, Brandyn - in a very nicely crafted poem.  If only we could learn to appreciate what we have while we have it, eh??..
poetFemmeFatale
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2 posted 05-12-2000 11:18 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Fabulous read sir!  Standing ovation from me!!  This packed a punch!  You certainly know how to "shine" through the rain...I just loved this!  Tender, yet strong!  It does feel good to be freed from pain, doesn't it?  
Butterflies_dont_cry
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3 posted 05-12-2000 11:57 AM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Brandyn* You've just looked into my soul...this is such an amazing piece.  The whole thing was written with bittersweet perfection but the ending was especially powerful.  Thank you from the bottom of my heart for sharing this.
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4 posted 05-12-2000 12:10 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wow! This is fantastic, Brandyn! Some always give and some only know how to take. You have expressed that very well here, and also shared the consequences!

Denise
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5 posted 05-12-2000 01:50 PM       View Profile for amazon_lover   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amazon_lover

Hi Brandyn!
That was nice and I can relate this as a person who regrets now.

Sincerely
A_L
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