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trevorskogsbergh
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0 posted 05-12-2000 03:36 AM       View Profile for trevorskogsbergh   Email trevorskogsbergh   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for trevorskogsbergh

In quiet night
I silently dreamed
That I could see for miles around

Amidst a garden
Full of clouds
I could barely see the ground

Above the mountains
But below the sky
I await the silent dawn

I sit and stare
And begin to smile
As then I start to yawn

Sleepily I lay
Upon a cloud
Thats floating up in the sky

I twist and turn
Ay my fading vision
My dream begins to die

Again I awake
Amongst the clouds
To the sounds of noisy grunts

To my alarm
I'm standing on
The shoulders of giants



 Better to die, and sleep
The never-waking sleep, than linger on
And dare to live when the souls life is gone.
© Copyright 2000 Trevor Skogsbergh - All Rights Reserved
netswan
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1 posted 05-12-2000 03:52 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

LOL cute poem , the ending was very
surprising

netswan
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2 posted 05-12-2000 11:46 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Ooohh...I liked the "dreaminess" in this during the first part, but you kind of lost me at the end!  LOL  I have some blonde highlights, so I'm gonna blame it on that!  ROFL      Interesting though to say the least!     You're very good at portraying the "dreamy" parts!  LOL
brian madden
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3 posted 05-12-2000 03:19 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Great twist at the end. cool dreamy bits, I liked it.. a lot.
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