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Skyfyre
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0 posted 05-12-2000 03:27 AM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Skyfyre

Alone with my thoughts, I cannot but wonder
What peril resides in this spell that Iím under --
What price shall demand, what pride there forsaken --
What more might expect, when so easily taken?

So tragic the hope, so painful the dreaming,
Precarious, sifting the truth from the seeming!
How much is too much -- or Ďtis better too little?
Unanswered, they rage -- and Iím caught in the middle ...

The tears will not come -- Iíve named them forbidden --
What I cannot control, I can choose to keep hidden;
So perfect the smile, let no censor decry it:
Though the fortress may fall, I shall only deny it.

Though wonder is past, there is peace in the knowing;
But Ďtis puzzling to sip when your cupís overflowing ...
The choices are plain: to wait, or surrender:
To take up the blade, and resume heartís defender.

I cannot but fail, for all of my trying:
I smother the ember for fear of its dying;
For excess in giving, I suffer receiving --
So much, swiftly offered -- too much for believing.

This tale has no end -- I write no conclusion --
Unless there is aught to be found in confusion;
Unwilling to leave, twice bitten for staying,
Oh I would there were rules for this game we are playing!




 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

© Copyright 2000 Linda Anderson - All Rights Reserved
netswan
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1 posted 05-12-2000 03:39 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

beautifully written sky  such  finese
such style and that darn song
of twice bitten twice shy  rings in my
ears.  

hugs to you in what I feel is much written
pain
ouch
netswan
Nan
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2 posted 05-12-2000 07:25 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Nice one Kess - and nice to see you again - I know you're busy, so I appreciate the time you can spend with us...

This is a wonderful deviation from your normal iambic mindset.. It's very well written, and equally as intense... Keep smiling..
REBECCA ALLYN
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3 posted 05-12-2000 10:02 AM       View Profile for REBECCA ALLYN   Email REBECCA ALLYN   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for REBECCA ALLYN

Very nice work!!!
I really like your writing
perfect!!


LOTS of LUV,
Becky
David2
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4 posted 05-12-2000 10:07 AM       View Profile for David2   Email David2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for David2

It is truly a shame that it is a game we play instead of an open and honest exchange of ideas mixed with love. Great poem, Skyfyre!
             David2
poetFemmeFatale
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5 posted 05-12-2000 11:08 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Powerful with a hint of anger in it....Bravissimo!  This thing really "bled" it's way down the screen, you used some mighty powerful phrases in there! WOW, is all I can say!  You GO girl!  
Denise
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6 posted 05-12-2000 12:46 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Just excellent writing, Kess! It is so good to see you again!

Denise
Danny Holloway
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7 posted 05-12-2000 03:04 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

You certainly have a talent for expressive writing.  The rhyme is married so well in this piece.  
A unique departure from you usual style.  
Excellent writing as always!
dh


 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

CocoBaci
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8 posted 05-12-2000 04:36 PM       View Profile for CocoBaci   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CocoBaci

Alas, a mirrored image of feelings I now read on screen .. This poem you write portrays the shape of one's heart so well.  Thank you for the sharing.
CocoBaci
Meadowmuse
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9 posted 05-12-2000 05:37 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Kess, I was glad to see your byline ~ I always look forward to reading your work, you know. This is a beautiful, somewhat bitter piece of writing...just my cup o' tea!

Take care,
~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


Janet Marie
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10 posted 05-12-2000 09:00 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

The tears will not come -- Iíve named them forbidden --
What I cannot control, I can choose to keep hidden;
So perfect the smile, let no censor decry it:
Though the fortress may fall, I shall only deny it.

----------------
I cannot but fail, for all of my trying:
I smother the ember for fear of its dying;
For excess in giving, I suffer receiving --
So much, swiftly offered -- too much for believing.

This tale has no end -- I write no conclusion --
Unless there is aught to be found in confusion;
Unwilling to leave, twice bitten for staying,
Oh I would there were rules for this game we are playing
---------------

*sigh* (of complacency)
but Kess...Im SO good at getting bitten twice
Ive had so much pratice *smile*
holding up those mirrors again...
tis scary indeed  
this poem is exceptional...
if ya find those rules...E-mail me a copy...
not that I'll play by them...*S*
take care, jm

 It's amazing
How you make your face just like a wall
How you take your heart and turn it off
How I turn my head and you lose it all ...
And it's unnerving
How one move just puts me by myself
There you go just trusting someone else
Now I know I put us both through hell ...
I'm not sayin
That there was nothing wrong
I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me
And I'm not sayin
We ever had the right to hold on
I just didn't wanna let you get away from me.
~MB20~Leave


Michael
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11 posted 05-13-2000 09:15 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

So much I could say here on a personal level, Kess.  I will simply and an "I know" and add a *sigh*.  From a poetic standpoint this was very strong - poignant all the way through and with excellent word choice.  

"This tale has no end -- I write no conclusion --
Unless there is aught to be found in confusion;"

I love it.

Michael
Sven
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12 posted 05-13-2000 12:31 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Kess,
     I can see now why you are not in the mood for my bliss today. . . I can feel the bitterness and the confusion in this one. . . and I can relate to the last line, there are rules, but no one can remember them because they keep changing. . .

And yes, I did also notice that this was not in your usual iambic rhythm. . .that's why I read it aloud. . .the rhythm fits the words well and adds to the feelings of confusion. . .

--------------------------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Skyfyre
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Posts 1966
Sitting in Michael's Lap


13 posted 05-14-2000 12:59 AM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Hello everyone ...  

netswan:  Thanks for the sympathy and the reply ... you know, I never did like that song ...

Nan:  Not sure whether that's a sincere comment or a veiled chastisment -- LOL.  Either way, thanks, and I'll try to get back as often as possible ...  

Rebecca:  Thanks dear, glad you enjoyed.  

David:  Such is reality.  It's seldom pretty ... thanks for reading.

Femme:  Yes, well -- 'twas a mood -- I'll leave it at that.  Thanks for the compliment.  

Denise:  Thanks hun -- glad to be able to visit.

Danny:  You're too kind -- but hey, I'm not going to argue ...  

Coco:  Welcome, and thanks right back atcha.

Claire:  Always enjoy your replies and your work ... thanks for reading.

JM:  So that was YOU I saw in the mirror -- nearly gave me a heart attack, girl!  Does this mean I have to stop sleeping naked..?  

Michael:  Tell me about it ...

Sven:  If you find some sort of method to this madness, please feel free to forward it ...

Smooches all,

--Kess
tracie66
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Posts 4587
Victoria, Australia


14 posted 05-14-2000 02:21 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Your expression is wonderful in this  
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


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