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If You Eat It ,Sleep It , And Breathe It (Does That Mean You're Obsessed ?)

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Dr.Moose1
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0 posted 05-11-2000 05:32 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dr.Moose1

A feast before her countenance does lie
it's riches not yet fully are revealed
What takes to whet this appetite none may
speak true , in depth the answer lies concealed

As night befalls the land of those who sleep
she conjures words to stay the hands of time
Evokes from them that which she wills to keep
a feather-bed of words in wraps of rhyme

Her breath in lyric fashion lay inscribed
on sheets of parchment touched with skill-full ink
That those who see must feel as though imbibed
of more import than fruit fermented drink

She squanders not one whit of precious day
For her there's far too much that she must say


© Copyright 2000 William E.Kleist - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 05-11-2000 05:36 PM       View Profile for David2   Email David2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for David2

Dr. Moose,
    You seem to conquered the sonnet format completely. This was very good!
         David2
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2 posted 05-12-2000 01:00 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Yes, you have become obsessed! Just like me! I think in iambic pentameter now, but I like it! It's so melodious......hehehehehe  

This is a beautiful sonnet, Dr.Moose! I absolutely love everything about it!

A challenge now I offer up to thee
Please pen a sonnet done acrostic'ly!


Denise

[This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 05-12-2000).]
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Beautifully written, to be sure. "Smitten" might be another word to consider...  

But seriously... your lovely archaic phrasing, rhythm and theme are superb here, Doc. Would that a poem of this caliber ever be written for me, I would find myself indebted, fully and infinitely, to its author.  

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


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4 posted 05-12-2000 01:21 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Dr~
So good to see you.
This is simply beautiful.
And the answer is YES !
Admittedly 'obsessed' ... and
loving every minute of it.
~*Marge*~



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5 posted 05-12-2000 07:03 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Obsessed?? Do I hear the word "Obsessed"??
Who's obsessed??? Scuse me - gotta find some more sonnets...
Dr.Moose1
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6 posted 05-12-2000 06:20 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Well here you go ladies...
d.
As much as you have given to this site
Perhaps is some small way this will repay
Often you bring you're own special insight
Entwined within the words you have to say

Many are the times that we've looked to see
Familiar signatures beneath what's writ
One that we notice much more frequently
Really has your name all over of it

Denise, please do accept this slight tribute
Encouraged by your kind words we have found
New reason to put pen to words long mute
In silence now no longer they are bound

Suffice it to be said with certainty
Everyone here with me on this agrees

Doc

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REBECCA ALLYN
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It's okay to be obsessed!!
great poem!!


LOTS of LUV,
Becky
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8 posted 05-12-2000 06:36 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Claire,
The pre-dawn light a grassy spanse enshrouds
No murmor of it's life as yet does stir
The silent mist enshrines this hallowed ground
Each verdant frond with purpose waits for her

She speaks a language to which they respond
Surrender nights lethargic stasis held
Mere breath from her of words does break this bond
And through her art the mists are now dispelled

Her name is one she takes from settings thus
Deservedly for imagery she shares
Serves often to inspire the rest of us
This "Meadowmuse" that fondly we call Claire

This glade she bathes in light found from within
Awaits , don't hesitate , Dear Claire , begin
Dr.Moose1
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9 posted 05-12-2000 06:47 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Marge,
Your kindness shows through all the words you speak
In debt I pen this oh so meager piece
Though most often my words are tongue in cheek
No such frivolity shall I release

But were I to I know you'd understand
And not take what I've said in the wrong way
This serious piece that I once had planned
May not turn out with quite what I would say

Sometimes I must succumb to that one half
Though there are times when seems to be much more
And do most anything for a good laugh
Is there much wrong with that , I do implore ?

Despite this quite pronounced propensity
Please know that your kind words mean much to me .

Doc


[This message has been edited by Dr.Moose1 (edited 05-14-2000).]
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10 posted 05-12-2000 06:51 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

No , Nan , I did not forget you , yours is next
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Dr~
Durn, you're GOOD !
You just ROCK ....
I love you to pieces.
Greatest sense of humor going on there !
Me ?  I am giggling !
Love you
~*Marge*~





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Dr. Moose, you are a sweetie! I knew you could do an acrostic sonnet, I just knew it! What I didn't know was that it would be for me! I'm touched! Thank you for your lovely poem! The ones for Claire and Marge are also very lovely! Can't wait to see the one for Nan!

Denise
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13 posted 05-14-2000 09:21 AM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

For Nan ,

The glow of phosphor rays casting their light
on her as long she sits into the night
Intent on lending help to those in need
maid fair we are aware of your kind deeds

Think not that we don't recognize your gifts
your presence on this site our spirits lift
Though I may be the one these words to pen
all would agree with this over again

Accept theses few small words of humble praise
Scarce will they compensate for all the days
you've spent in helping us to get it right
Perhaps they'll bring you warmth on some cold night

And now a word from one who's screws are loose
Thanks Nan , for all the fun , yours truly , Moose
Kit McCallum
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All were a pleasure to read Dr. Moose, from your wonderful sonnet, to your sweet tributes to the ladies above. Beautiful, and a joy to read!

Best wishes,
/Kit
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15 posted 05-14-2000 10:28 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Ah, that's so nice, Dr.Moose! I'm sure she'll love it!

Denise
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16 posted 05-16-2000 05:49 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Please forgive me, Dr. Moose, for silence thus
As unaware of lovely verse inscribed for us
You'd placed upon this Passions Scroll for all to read
Displaying, sweet, a gifting true of word and deed

Dr. Moose, these are "all" quite luminous...I admire your talent! (and thank you, fully and infinitely, for inclusion in your presentation)

~ Claire



 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


 
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