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Corazon
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0 posted 05-11-2000 10:29 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corazon

pieces of me

one
two more
sometimes too many at a time
falling tumbling
holding me together
weighing me down
I struggle to round
them up and put
them back in place
but somewhere along the line
I lost the cover of the puzzle
and I canít seem to find
where they fit
so I stuff them
where ever
just to keep from losing
something
I might someday need
but the mirror shows the me
that is the result
of my puzzle piecing
my lack of goals
my anger strutted walk
though life
and I donít think thatís what
the picture on the box is supposed to
look like
so
its no wonder that I put a corner piece
where my heart should go
and now it hurts
when it beats
against the jangling angles
I have cornered inside of me
and even my poems are
suffering along side with the
inside of me
they wander and lose sight
and have no end
no beginning and I canít put
them together right
in the middle
eitherÖ
and another piece
falls

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REBECCA ALLYN
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1 posted 05-11-2000 10:32 AM       View Profile for REBECCA ALLYN   Email REBECCA ALLYN   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for REBECCA ALLYN

WOW!! such heart!!
I really can feel where you are coming from on this one!!Wonderful work!!!
Remember:there is always a rainbow after the storm

LOTS of LUV,
Becky
devina
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2 posted 05-11-2000 10:38 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Me thinks you just need a gentle hand to put your puzzle back together dearest!!! ((((HUGS)))) and more if you need them!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Corazon
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3 posted 05-11-2000 11:21 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

thanks you two...am just feeling "misplaced" lately.....hugs back
aurora
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4 posted 05-11-2000 11:30 AM       View Profile for aurora   Email aurora   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aurora

WOW!!!  Your poem really tapped into my own struggle to fit the puzzle together, thanks!!
Just hold on, your clarity will return!
Sincerely,
Aurora
Denise
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5 posted 05-11-2000 11:37 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Well, Corazon, you may be feeling out of place but your poems are certainly not suffering from it. They are some of the best I have read!

Denise
doreen peri
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6 posted 05-11-2000 12:42 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

it's a unique moment for me when all my pieces fit together...

again, i really identify with your work

well written metaphor... nice job!
suthern
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7 posted 05-11-2000 01:00 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Great poem, discombobulated one!! *S*
RainbowGirl
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8 posted 05-11-2000 01:57 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Hang in there sweetheart, sometimes it's the picture on the box that's all wrong and what makes up the real picture is incredibly beautiful...yes?..

You take care

HUSG
Corazon
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9 posted 05-11-2000 02:40 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

Aurora thanks...hope you do better at your puzzle than me  

Denise thank you, your praise always makes me smile  

doreen peri from you that means alot   thank you

suthern those are might big words for a southern gal *g*....good to see you here...thank you  

RainbowGirl  hey...I like your way of thinking...wanna help me build my puzzle? lol I get the feeling we will like the picture we come up with  

Butterflies_dont_cry
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10 posted 05-11-2000 07:17 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Corazon* This is superb!! Every line drew me in deeper and left me with a feeling of understanding.  I don't see your poems suffering at all!! Poetry is a chance to work it all out and perhaps make things fit how they are supposed to....my own puzzel is missing a few edge and middle pieces as well   Well done and thank you for sharing this piece!!
lorilockheart
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11 posted 05-11-2000 07:32 PM       View Profile for lorilockheart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lorilockheart

You are so creative!  I enjoyed every line of this poem, getting closer and closer to the meaning.  Unique expression of how jumbled up we sometimes feel.  Let me tell you, I think you've got it together more than you know - the way you've put it into words shows you are really in touch with yourself.  I enjoyed this one - lots!
Lori

 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance.
song by LeeAnn Womack
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Kit McCallum
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12 posted 05-11-2000 07:40 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

You've put your words together beautifully into a lovely picturesque package Corazon ... this is a wonderful and flowing verse!

Best wishes,
/Kit
Tara Simms
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13 posted 05-11-2000 08:09 PM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

Corazon, I love your poetry.  You put so much heart and feeling into it.  




 It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley


Balladeer
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14 posted 05-11-2000 09:09 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Nuts. I thought by the title you were having a garage sale.

You're writing is, as always, hard hitting and real, Corazon. This one is no exception.
Marge Tindal
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15 posted 05-11-2000 11:14 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Corazon~

I loved this ...

If the pieces of the puzzle of me
ever come together ... someone might just
take me apart, put me back in the box and take me to that garage sale Balladeer thought you were having.

This render was brilliantly displayed.
Your writing is 'jig-sawing' nicely.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Corazon
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16 posted 05-15-2000 09:21 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

thanks all *big soft smile* my life is so jumbled these days that I was surprised to see responses from PIP in my mail, I barely rememeber last week and the writing of this...so again....thank you, your responses sit kindly and softly in my heart  
Aimster
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17 posted 05-15-2000 09:50 AM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

Corazon--

this poem touched me more than you can imagine...i sometimes feel like this too...like nothing fits where it should anymore and i have no clue as to what the next day is going to hold for me. you captured your feelings both brilliantly and beautifully in this piece...I really admire your style of writing! great poem!!

take care,
amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
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