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An Inch Away

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 05-11-2000 06:57 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

If I could write this
on my knees,
in prayer--my heart
soft in her plea,
every atom split in two--
that's all that I would want from you.

And if my tingling
lips would stop,
I'd damn them,
from my very mouth...
And should my eyes
choose not to cry--
my breath would weep
within each sigh...

How shall I cry?
Explain this pain?
How give my all
and still remain?

Why is it
you're an inch away?
How can I leave?
How can I stay?
© Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Sudhir Iyer
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since 04-26-2000
Posts 7206
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium


1 posted 05-11-2000 07:26 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Serenity,
This one is real good!

How often do we experience that the one that we love is so close yet so far... and the desperation increases with the passage of time, it really does...posing questions...


Regards, sudhir

 In any moment of decision,
The best thing you can do is the right thing,
The next-best thing is the wrong thing,
And the worst thing you can do is nothing.
- Theodore Roosevelt
Janet Marie
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since 01-22-2000
Posts 18986


2 posted 05-11-2000 08:20 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

oh man,*shaking me head*
ya know how I like to cut and paste the lines that effect me the most...
I tried to do it here and I kept highlighting the whole damn poem!!
Every line me twin...every line...
I felt each perfect word.
serenity this poem is SO emotionally PERFECT and amazing...
man, you are just so good at this *smile*
(in case ya cant tell) I LOVE this poem. *S*
except for the part of how Im gonna walk around with poet envy all day cause I didnt write it *smile*...
but I think can live with it  
loves ya me poetice sweetness
jm



 It's amazing
How you make your face just like a wall
How you take your heart and turn it off
How I turn my head and you lose it all ...
And it's unnerving
How one move just puts me by myself
There you go just trusting someone else
Now I know I put us both through hell ...
I'm not sayin
That there was nothing wrong
I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me
And I'm not sayin
We ever had the right to hold on
I just didn't wanna let you get away from me.
~MB20~Leave


Rex Allen McCoy
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since 01-30-2000
Posts 2636
Sippin a Timmy's in London


3 posted 05-11-2000 04:10 PM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

You always write so beautifully ... and I'm not the best at reading between the lines ...
but this really has a strong emotional plea ... more for understanding than for love
Very well done

Rex
Sven
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since 11-23-1999
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Lansing, MI USA


4 posted 05-11-2000 11:05 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Excellent Serenity, I can hear your plea in the lonliness of the night. . .

Superb poem. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Meadowmuse
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since 12-27-1999
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5 posted 05-11-2000 11:08 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Serenity, this is beautiful writing...

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


 
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