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What's fair ?
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What's fair ? |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
A vote on what’s fair The best days of my life are gone, All rotten and wasted, Departed, I’ve had all my chances, I could have done more, But the hindsight’s annoying, Ironic, So raw . I’m all alone forgotten and prone, Only scavengers around all after my bones, Hyenas are laughing, My life one big joke, I hope they just choke, The jackals in packs, They know how to live, They all have there soul mates, They hug and they kiss, Death to them, My jealousy rises, You see, I have nothing, My mood in disguises, I smile, I laugh, I joke and I care, I pretend all these things, To me it’s just darkness, You see the vultures, Plucked out my blue eyes, There’s only one segment of my brain that survives, The bit that controls the sorrow and burden, The depth, The darkness, The love I am certain, I feel this still when my head’s empty, This then must come from the heart, Upon entry, The crows and rooks, Who have my soul, The predator though at the source of this dole, I’m ruptured, Defenceless, The defeat isn’t fair, She takes the first chunk, The whole heart, Does she dare ? Her jaws take a bite, Delicious and rare, You can’t talk, Discuss terms with a lion take care, When you mess with this cat, Your heart will be there, Open, Defenceless, Stupid to care . Written by Tom Baker. With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one . |
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WolfsMate Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 121New York |
Enjoyed this much! Well done!  "You never have to worry...Never fear for I am near" |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Oooohhh....very bloody, but such is life.  I can relate with so many of your lines here! I like how you saw yourself being eaten by the critters.  Although, you made it a little humerous, I could still read the pain. Nothing is worse, than regret. Looking back at wasted years, and wishing you had done things differently. When I catch myself doing that, I smack myself a time or two, and say "Hey, do something good with tomorrow, and that way, you can stop regretting yesterday..." As long as you're still breathing, you have the opportunity to do something good yet. Take advantage of it, and don't let another day slip by with your head hung low. I have faith in you man! With all my heart, Gennifer Did I tell you how good this poem was, btw? It really "spoke" to me. Thanks for sharing! |
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PericolosoAmore Junior Member
since 2000-04-14
Posts 31 |
Were do I start my dear dear friend. how many similies? the comparison to animals is what makes it fantastic. the short sweet lines add to the tension,and strength of this poem. you know I'm always, always, always here for you, and so is everyone else. I feel the pain for you, I've been there, it will get better I promise. take note of my signature. L+L+L+L+L.of.L You know who I am. |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Thanks all, I felt very bad when I wrote this poem, and writting it actually cheered me up, as it released all the crud I had inside, I am glad you enjoyed it . I appreciate your support friends . L.of.L. Tom . Insanity is a perfectly normal responce to an abnormal world -R.D.Laing.- |
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