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What's fair ?

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angelswing
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0 posted 05-11-2000 04:24 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for angelswing

A vote on whatís fair

The best days of my life are gone,
All rotten and wasted,
Departed,
Iíve had all my chances,
I could have done more,
But the hindsightís annoying,
Ironic,
So raw .
Iím all alone forgotten and prone,
Only scavengers around all after my bones,
Hyenas are laughing,
My life one big joke,
I hope they just choke,
The jackals in packs,
They know how to live,
They all have there soul mates,
They hug and they kiss,
Death to them,
My jealousy rises,
You see,
I have nothing,
My mood in disguises,
I smile,
I laugh,
I joke and I care,
I pretend all these things,
To me itís just darkness,
You see the vultures,
Plucked out my blue eyes,
Thereís only one segment of my brain that survives,
The bit that controls the sorrow and burden,
The depth,
The darkness,
The love I am certain,
I feel this still when my headís empty,
This then must come from the heart,
Upon entry,
The crows and rooks,
Who have my soul,
The predator though at the source of this dole,
Iím ruptured,
Defenceless,
The defeat isnít fair,
She takes the first chunk,
The whole heart,
Does she dare ?
Her jaws take a bite,
Delicious and rare,
You canít talk,
Discuss terms with a lion take care,
When you mess with this cat,
Your heart will be there,
Open,
Defenceless,
Stupid to care .

Written by Tom Baker.



 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .
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WolfsMate
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since 01-14-2000
Posts 122
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1 posted 05-11-2000 11:43 AM       View Profile for WolfsMate   Email WolfsMate   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for WolfsMate

Enjoyed this much! Well done!  

 "You never have to worry...Never fear for I am near"
poetFemmeFatale
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since 07-25-99
Posts 2961
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2 posted 05-11-2000 12:17 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Oooohhh....very bloody, but such is life.    I can relate with so many of your lines here!  I like how you saw yourself being eaten by the critters.    Although, you made it a little humerous, I could still read the pain.  Nothing is worse, than regret.  Looking back at wasted years, and wishing you had done things differently.  When I catch myself doing that, I smack myself a time or two, and say "Hey, do something good with tomorrow, and that way, you can stop regretting yesterday..."  As long as you're still breathing, you have the opportunity to do something good yet.  Take advantage of it, and don't let another day slip by with your head hung low.  I have faith in you man!  With all my heart,  Gennifer  
Did I tell you how good this poem was, btw?  It really "spoke" to me.  Thanks for sharing!
PericolosoAmore
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3 posted 05-11-2000 01:44 PM       View Profile for PericolosoAmore   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PericolosoAmore

Were do I start my dear dear friend.
how many similies?
the comparison to animals is what makes it fantastic.
the short sweet lines add to the tension,and strength of this poem.

you know I'm always, always, always here for you, and so is everyone else.
I feel the pain for you, I've been there, it will get better I promise.

take note of my signature.

L+L+L+L+L.of.L
You know who I am.
angelswing
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since 02-10-2000
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4 posted 06-29-2000 04:10 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

Thanks all, I felt very bad when I wrote this poem, and writting it actually cheered me up, as it released all the crud I had inside, I am glad you enjoyed it . I appreciate your support friends .
L.of.L. Tom .


Insanity is a perfectly normal responce to an abnormal world -R.D.Laing.-
 
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