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Bacardi747
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since 2000-05-11
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0 posted 2000-05-11 03:27 AM



                  The Candle

As time passes on, the more we learn,
No matter what happens, the candle will burn.
It sits in its holder still as the night,
Giving everyone around a glimpse of light.
Generations will pass, centuries will turn,
But yet the candle continues to burn.

What puts it out is a gust of wind,
But someone will come and light it again.
This flame is something for which we yearn,
Amazed by the feat of its talent to burn.
It signifies peace at many events,
Maybe the reason for which it was sent.

Admire this candle, we all will do,
Whether we're happy, or whether were blue.
It's been with us time after time,
Knowing it's neither yours nor mine.
For it belongs to everyone here,
Burning forever without any fear.

Days go on, and on go days,
Gradually the flame descends to a haze.
A lifetime of memories come to a halt,
The candle died, it was no ones fault.
Being through all the twists and turns,
This candle no longer burns.

© Copyright 2000 Bacardi747 - All Rights Reserved
PhaerieChild
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since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon
1 posted 2000-05-11 03:32 AM


Nicely written piece. The ending was sadly bittersweet but inevitable. We can't shine forever though it would be nice sometimes. BTW Welcome to Passions in Poetry. Wonderful introduction poem.

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho



Deborahlee
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since 2000-05-08
Posts 3

2 posted 2000-05-11 03:37 AM


bacardi-
     this is a great poem for a first post.
what a good use of symbolism you have. you can tell a lot of time went into this piece. i look forward to more of your work!

angelswing
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since 2000-02-10
Posts 705
United Kingdom
3 posted 2000-05-11 03:48 AM


WELCOME to the home of the talented, join our ranks and fight along side us . Great poem, I really enjoyed reading it, it had some bite to it and was really meaningful, very touching .
L.of.L. TOM .


 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .

lucky
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since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601
Idaho
4 posted 2000-05-11 04:03 AM


Nice debut... welcome to passions home of poetry.
CSwtThng
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since 1999-07-28
Posts 124

5 posted 2000-05-11 04:09 AM


Great poem! I can't wait to read more.
tracie66
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
Australia
6 posted 2000-05-11 06:08 AM


A warm welcome to you, nice first post  
so much truth in this and I can't wait to read more from you.
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
7 posted 2000-05-11 09:01 AM


Welcome to passions...I'll be looking for more of your work  
Kellsue
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 210
Waukesha, WI USA
8 posted 2000-05-11 09:22 AM


Very nice poem...welcome to Passions!

~Kelly


 Reflect upon your present blessings-of which every man has many-not on your past misfortunes, of which all men have some. ~Charles Dickens

We make a living by what we get, but we make a life by what we give. ~Winston Churchill


Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 997
northern mountains, Idaho
9 posted 2000-05-11 11:55 AM


This is so exquisitely beautiful, and so terribly sad!  It jerked me off my feet, and brought me to my knees.  Tears.

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