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My Immortal Beloved

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Marina
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0 posted 05-11-2000 02:38 AM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Marina

My Immortal Beloved


Without you, I am despair
Come to me from masked curtain
In deathblow, we, the perfect pair
Relieve my heart, and bestow your burden


I offer myself, let it be your denote
Take me; end my inner jousted affair
Sink fangs of ecstasy to throat
Let me be damned, hear my prayer

I am your wilting flower
On me, I beg you… feed
Give me your gift, the power
Implant the black magic, I am your seed

Drain my very essence from vein
And give me mortal death
With transfusion, my life sustain
Kiss me, and suck my last breath

……. My immortal beloved

Marina May 2000


© Copyright 2000 Marina Crossley - All Rights Reserved
Jeffrey Carter
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1 posted 05-11-2000 02:44 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Ooooh,,

I love the way you write. Especially about this subject. Vampires have always been a fascination of mine.

All my love,
Jeffrey

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

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2 posted 05-11-2000 11:05 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Back to the top for those who may have missed this one.

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

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3 posted 05-11-2000 11:23 AM       View Profile for aurora   Email aurora   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aurora

Excellent work!!! I am fascinated by the passion and longing you have shown! Keep writing!
Aurora
TerryW
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4 posted 05-11-2000 11:42 AM       View Profile for TerryW   Email TerryW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TerryW's Home Page   View IP for TerryW

Oh, Marina~~~
     You got me with this one -- I have long been a diehard fan of the Vampyrie - I love Anne Rice and have read everything she has written about the lovely masters of the night.  You have such dark, ecstatic passion in this one -- it took my breath away!!!!!




Love Ya~

 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.
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5 posted 05-11-2000 12:22 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

WAY COOL poem Marina-girl.
this is so well written.
creative and imaginative.
perfect imagery
I bet your a fun first date   LOL
great work here...
take care, jm

 It's amazing
How you make your face just like a wall
How you take your heart and turn it off
How I turn my head and you lose it all ...
And it's unnerving
How one move just puts me by myself
There you go just trusting someone else
Now I know I put us both through hell ...
I'm not sayin
That there was nothing wrong
I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me
And I'm not sayin
We ever had the right to hold on
I just didn't wanna let you get away from me.
~MB20~Leave


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6 posted 05-11-2000 12:33 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Marina~ This is so great! I like vampire stuff, but not "into" it....anyway, this was like watching it instead of reading it!Excellent! -SEA
Danny Holloway
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7 posted 05-11-2000 02:11 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Marina, really enjoying your writing.  Seems to get better with each new post.  
~~very nice!!
DH
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8 posted 05-11-2000 06:53 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

"Kiss me and suck my last breath".  Now that sounds like my kind of kissing.  I must have a little bit of vampire in my blood.  This is an interesting mood.  James
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9 posted 05-11-2000 10:56 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Superb Marina, you are really stretching yourself these days. . . and doing very well. . .

Excellent. . .

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--Victor Frankl

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loved the desire showed for the other, to suck up all the others love and energy.
Marina
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11 posted 05-12-2000 12:17 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Jeffery, I am glad you liked it.  It was fun to write. Thank you.

Aurora, thank you very much

Terry, Anne Rice defibiyely played a part in this one.  I am almost done reading your series.  Fasinating books indeed. Thank you for yout post.

James, didn't you know I had you in mind when I wrote it??? LOL

Danny what a sweet compliment for you to say.  Thank you very, very much.


Sea, thank you I'm glad you liked it.


Jm, I6t is the funniest thing....I get lots of first dates but very many seconds, or thirds!  They seem to " die off me" so quickly.

Sven, my support when all else fails.  Thank you, you know how much your words mean to me.

Rodebud, thank you.

Marina
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Sounds like you've been reading the same Vampire novels I have girlie!!! You've done well with the subject, I assure you!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Marina
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13 posted 05-12-2000 07:12 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

devina, thanks.  It seems everyone is into these books lately.

Marina
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