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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 05-11-2000 02:19 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for wayoutwalt

Frustration

Two lawn chairs and two good friends
Sitting in the midnight breeze alone
The storefront lights have long since died
And the pretty girls have all gone home

The first friend, Tim, flicks his cigarette
And searches for his favorite star
There are so many up there he says
"Why does Jesus need to be so far"

"I shall save myself," he laughs tonight
And raises high upon the chair
He free falls to the pavement hard
And curses God for not being there

Jack the silent type cant help but laugh
No hand stretched to his would be brother
Tim gets up and curses God once more
Jack always winced afraid hed smother

Tim and Jack two childhood best friends
Both could have served the Mighty King
One says too much but does not believe
The other believes but just says nothing




[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 05-11-2000).]
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PhaerieChild
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1 posted 05-11-2000 02:22 AM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Wowzers Walt!!! There's some food for thought in this one! Really enjoyed this post.

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2 posted 05-11-2000 04:05 AM       View Profile for WolfsMate   Email WolfsMate   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for WolfsMate

Awesome!!

 "You never have to worry...Never fear for I am near"
wayoutwalt
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3 posted 05-11-2000 07:53 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

thanx wild and wolf yuh i apprecite much yur comments
Lost Dreamer
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4 posted 05-11-2000 08:01 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Walt you are amazing, this poem has a marvelous message, great job.  
wayoutwalt
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5 posted 05-11-2000 02:22 PM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

thanx losty yur sweet for sayin so o yuh
Corazon
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6 posted 05-11-2000 02:26 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

you have a great style, simple and straightforward, it seems, but always with a deeper meaning...this one is very real very honest,very well written...I like!

[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 05-15-2000).]
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7 posted 05-11-2000 02:43 PM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Wow, Walt - this is wonderful!  It really touched me!  So, since imitation is the sincerest form of flattery, I'd like to try to thank you in your own style:

makes ya think, yuh, yuh!


Troy

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WhtDove
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8 posted 05-11-2000 10:15 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Frustration is right bud! One who don't believe and one who says nothing at all.
Hmmn, what were you doing?
Tom26
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9 posted 05-11-2000 10:44 PM       View Profile for Tom26   Email Tom26   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tom26

Good one Walt. This poem is really well written.

 Work like you don't need the money, Love like you've never been hurt,and dance like nobody's watching- Anonymus
wayoutwalt
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10 posted 05-12-2000 12:07 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

i'm tryin on some one yuh and they dont wanna believe and its frustrating yuh i just wish that "tim" woulda had less "jacks" in his life is all
SpitFire
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11 posted 05-12-2000 12:11 AM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Hey there,...I'm a bit new to this room and still getting to know people (names to poems etc).  Your name is catchy...your posts are great. I liked this post lots...got me thinking..look forward to reading more of your work.
wayoutwalt
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12 posted 05-12-2000 07:48 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

well thank yuh spitfire that was mighty nice of yuh to say and welcome to passions this is the best site ever o yuh!
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13 posted 05-12-2000 11:55 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wow! This one packs a powerful punch, Walt.

Denise
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14 posted 05-12-2000 12:22 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

You've hit upon a delicate subject with this one Walt!!! Many are in one catogory or the other...hopefully more will believe AND admit to it!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

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