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~What Goes Around~

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REBECCA ALLYN
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since 05-09-2000
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Lima,Ohio


0 posted 05-10-2000 08:32 PM       View Profile for REBECCA ALLYN   Email REBECCA ALLYN   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for REBECCA ALLYN

His piercing eyes watched me
as he walked out the door
as he raised his hand to hit me
my heart fell to the floor
He said it was my fault
he never really wanted to hurt me
that's when I opened my eyes
to look at him and really began to see
He promised me the world
but all I wanted was his heart
the first time that he hurt me
I nearly fell apart


The bruises,the beatings
add up to so much more than just hurt feelings
the bloody nose,the black eye
I'm sick of pleading with him to tell me why
All the words you say to me
are just words unless their true
but I don't think you understand
exactly what these words can do


Then came the drinking
and all my dreams began to fall
sometimes I wonder how I ever stood so tall
The things he used to say to me to make me cry
the time he let his best friend smack me
made me want to wither up and die
But I want you to remember
with everything you do
what goes around comes around
and believe me
it will come around to you

© Copyright 2000 REBECCA ALLYN - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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1 posted 05-10-2000 08:41 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Hi...please understand that what I say about the content of this poem is my own personal opinion....if you are in an abusive relationship, I hope you are getting help! Do not stay with this man...I read another poem of yours that seemed to suggest that you would stay with him no matter what. No one, woman, child or man deserves to be treated this way....

Your poetry is raw and full of emotion...that's why being a poet is so great isn't it..we can get it all out ...

One small note...you have posted so many poems in the time you've been on, in this forum and others..that it's going to show in the number of replies you get. Our forum moves quickly, we try to read all the poems we can...if you post 4 or 5, only 1 or 2 may be read...there are just so many on here to read...that said, welcome to the family ....
REBECCA ALLYN
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since 05-09-2000
Posts 91
Lima,Ohio


2 posted 05-10-2000 08:46 PM       View Profile for REBECCA ALLYN   Email REBECCA ALLYN   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for REBECCA ALLYN

Thanks!!
Please understand this
I just write what ever I feel.
I am not in a bad relationship at all I just get this urge to write and I have no idea what's going on until it's done....
Nan
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3 posted 05-10-2000 08:51 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

You seem to have a very personal understanding of abusive relationships.  I expect that you're likely involved in one.  Women remain in such situations for a variety of reasons - most frequently because they fear the insecurity of the unknown and justify the security of their current situation.  They're with someone who "loves" them and wouldn't ever hurt them if they were "sober".... But then we have a dichotomous problem to deal with, don't we??

I've seen women remain in situations long past reason... But I can't say I've ever seen anyone stay in a relationship where his "best friend" was also allowed to partake of the abuse...

I have to agree with Poet deVine here.  If this is a real situation, you MUST get some help... ASAP
EagleOne
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Between a laugh and a tear...


4 posted 05-10-2000 09:51 PM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

As Poet deVine said  "Raw and full of emotion", and as Nan has touched on you do seem to have some insight ito this type of situation! you certainly convey the feeling well.
I like your work!

 Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien
WhtDove
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since 07-22-99
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5 posted 05-11-2000 10:04 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Rebecca I replied to this last night but I guess it didn't work. I was having problems and wasn't able to get back online until now.

You have written a poem that I for one can relate to. I've been in this situation and it's hard to believe you can write such things without having been through it, or in it. I really hope you're not in a situation like this, and if you are that you get out of it. It don't get better, it gets worse.

It is full of emotion, it brings back memories I don't care to remember, but has made me stronger because of the situation.


From one Rebecca to another Welcome to Passions  
REBECCA ALLYN
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since 05-09-2000
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Lima,Ohio


6 posted 05-11-2000 10:40 AM       View Profile for REBECCA ALLYN   Email REBECCA ALLYN   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for REBECCA ALLYN

Thanks to all you guys for your concerns!!


LOTS of LUV,
Becky
lorilockheart
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since 05-06-2000
Posts 206
Alabama


7 posted 05-11-2000 07:16 PM       View Profile for lorilockheart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lorilockheart

Wow.  It's hard to know what to say after that.  I have no words of wisdom or advice, but just to say that your writing has again proven to be very powerful, emotional, deep, and touching.
Lori

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I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance.
song by LeeAnn Womack
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Kit McCallum
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8 posted 05-11-2000 07:26 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

I echo all of the above Rebecca ... whether you write for yourself ... or a friend, when powerful emotions are set to paper, we can surprise even ourselves with our ability to look at things objectively, if even for a moment.  This is powerful writing Rebecca ...

Best wishes,
/Kit
tracie66
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since 01-18-2000
Posts 4587
Victoria, Australia


9 posted 05-11-2000 09:02 PM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Rebecca~
This is very heartbreaking and I dearly hope you are way outta there for your sake. Tis true what goes around comes around and eventually he will get his.
Noone deserves to be treated like that and letting his mate smack you what an @#%*? I'm really sorry you had to go through this but glad your strong enough to know you don't need him and just move on and definately don't look back.
Tracie~

 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


 
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