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REBECCA ALLYN
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since 2000-05-09
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Lima,Ohio

0 posted 2000-05-10 05:38 PM


Empower yourself over me
Tell me what it is I have to be
put me in my place and make me do as you say
Tell me everything has to be your way
push me around and tell me how to feel
make me cry then tell me it's no big deal
Lie to me time and time again
cheat on me and make me think it's my sin
Believe that you are everything and I am nothing
break me down and make me feel something
Promise to be ever faithful and true
please don't tell me eyes are beautiful
come up with something new
Smack me around and show me you're a man
make me fall in love with you and forget about my plan
Let me trust you fully,let me love you wholly
just give me a reason to be with you
and I promise to make you fall too



© Copyright 2000 REBECCA ALLYN - All Rights Reserved
lorilockheart
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 206
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1 posted 2000-05-10 08:02 PM


Yes, it's me again... powerful, deep, emotional, intense..............

You're good.

Lori

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I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance.
song by LeeAnn Womack
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REBECCA ALLYN
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Lima,Ohio
2 posted 2000-05-10 08:04 PM


Lori,
Thank you so much
you are too kind!!!


Lots Of Love,
Becky

Nan
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3 posted 2000-05-10 08:41 PM


Becky, I normally wouldn't respond to a poem such as this because of its masochistic nature.  I do feel compelled to tell you that I hope this is a hypothetical situation for you... if not, you'll be setting yourself up for some rather intensive and potentially dangerous life situations...
Poet deVine
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4 posted 2000-05-10 08:43 PM


Becky, I just replied to another poem of yours...this one disturbs me...I do hope this is not your life you are describing! You are a worthy person and should not remain in this kind of relationship...  
REBECCA ALLYN
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since 2000-05-09
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Lima,Ohio
5 posted 2000-05-10 08:49 PM


I want every one to understand that I do love myself and I am not in a bad relationship. I just have to write what ever comes out of my head or I will go nuts!!
Do you guys understand?

EagleOne
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6 posted 2000-05-10 09:24 PM


Firstly, I think most of us here understand.   Secondly this is indeed an intense piece of work. Keep writing!< !signature-->

 Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien

[This message has been edited by EagleOne (edited 05-10-2000).]

Poet deVine
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7 posted 2000-05-10 09:29 PM


Thanks for clearing it up Becky....  
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