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SpitFire
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0 posted 2000-05-10 02:25 PM


~You~

You itch
I scratch
you spill
I clean
you fall
I hug
you cry
I wipe
you sick
I fix
you hungry
I feed
you sleep
I watch.


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insect
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1 posted 2000-05-10 02:41 PM


This is beautiful. It makes me think of children and part of the day they may go through.
To watch them sleep gives a parent a wonderful feeling. A parent always wants to be there for  their children  and this poem says it.

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2 posted 2000-05-10 02:45 PM


SpitFire~ as a Mom, the automatic responses to each need is what I can relate to so well,3 times over! I really like this one.....she says while printing!! -SEA
SpitFire
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3 posted 2000-05-10 02:52 PM


~Thank you both for sweet replies...I don't have any children yet but I take care of them and can relate   I think that when I originally wrote it it was for someone I love lots.
Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2000-05-10 03:01 PM


SpitFire,
Excellent, 24 karat gold.

msstt
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5 posted 2000-05-10 03:51 PM


Very good here.It does make me think so much of my four little ones.

Tricia

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6 posted 2000-05-10 06:53 PM


Wonderful, wonderful poem!  
I love children, needy souls that they are!
~Heather

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