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Sunshine
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0 posted 2000-05-10 11:52 AM


...Where does it Lead you...?

...when I ask certain questions...
and leave a leading line...
does it cause you to pause,
and wonder where my mind

then goes, or do I leave a question
yet to be asked...
does it give you hope...
or is it a task

to think “here, she is strange,
leaving little ellipses around
like fallen soldiers
to the ground...”

...but did they lead you here...?
To see what is said?
and do they leave open in your mind
any questions in your head?

...or perhaps...just perhaps
it is a line of hope...
whether in summary, or
in form of a rope
left for you
to hang
from...

something for you to think about
while I am gone...


10 May 2000
©KRJ




 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


© Copyright 2000 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Temptress
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1 posted 2000-05-10 08:25 PM


Well, it definetely kept me hanging on.   The ending is a tease if ya ask me.


 Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"

Poet deVine
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2 posted 2000-05-10 10:07 PM


Cute..someone said I'm doing more ellipses lately....hmm....wonder what he meant by that...hm....could it be?......
Janet Marie
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3 posted 2000-05-11 01:33 AM


and hes gonna miss ya when your gone too.
LOVE the poetic sarcasim in this one Sun.
they can be so dense? yes? yes! *smile*
take care,jm

 It's amazing
How you make your face just like a wall
How you take your heart and turn it off
How I turn my head and you lose it all ...
And it's unnerving
How one move just puts me by myself
There you go just trusting someone else
Now I know I put us both through hell ...
I'm not sayin
That there was nothing wrong
I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me
And I'm not sayin
We ever had the right to hold on
I just didn't wanna let you get away from me.
~MB20~Leave



hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 2000-05-11 08:47 AM


Sometimes all we can do is hang on and hope for the best. Take care and hurry back  
Sunshine
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5 posted 2000-05-11 09:18 AM


well, this one was fun...to see all of the different responses it evoked...I'm not going anywhere...and there was no "he" to choke...
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